The personal information of many individuals is held by large internet companies and organizations.
Do you think the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?
It is indisputable that internet plays a crucial role in developing the society and economy systems nowadays. Some people have provided their individual data to some massive internet corporations and establishments. In my viewpoint, this could bring more benefits for the user.
It is clear that giving our own information to huge internet corporations is necessary because every apps need our data online. For example, if you want to sign up a face book account, it requires you to have an email or phone number, so we need to create an email; it is all related to each other. Secondly, when you want to shop online because you don’t have enough time to go to the store and buy the item that you need, so providing your personal information is obligatory; then, you just need to wait for your goods. Thirdly, supplying our individual data for them is a best initiative for protecting and storing our information. For example, if you want to create a bank account, they would type all your personal information into computer, so that you do not need to be worry about losing and forgetting your data and those data would be safeguarded. It would also easier for that bank to find and manage your stuff, too.
Nevertheless, some internet syndicates do not accomplish information good enough, so that creating opportunities for hackers to infiltrate through the main system of that syndicate, this makes some of individual data leaking out and it also a probability for hackers to steal people’s identities. Another reason for leaking personal data is that people have provided their own information for un-security website or un-knowing companies. This is the most hazardous one.
In conclusion, giving our own information to huge internet corporations could bring more benefits than disadvantages.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use 'the' with the superlative.
Suggestion: the
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...nitiative for protecting and storing our information. For example, if you want to...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly, for example, in conclusion, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 24.0651302605 175% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 26.0 41.998997996 62% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1516.0 1615.20841683 94% => OK
No of words: 297.0 315.596192385 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.10437710438 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15134772569 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94050256592 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 154.0 176.041082164 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.518518518519 0.561755894193 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 479.7 506.74238477 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 71.3319600229 49.4020404114 144% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.615384615 106.682146367 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8461538462 20.7667163134 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.15384615385 7.06120827912 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.173058582691 0.244688304435 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.065092224039 0.084324248473 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0341184394985 0.0667982634062 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.106336015206 0.151304729494 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0244468927205 0.056905535591 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 13.0946893788 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.6 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.45 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 78.4519038076 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.