On balance advertising is more harmful than beneficial To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Nowadays, advertising is a trendy way to sell products. Some people think that advertising would not bring any good result and also harmful, but others believe that this would be a magnificent method to vend items. In my opinion, it is essential to look at both sides of the view.
Advertisement may have a lot of benefits in modern life. Mostly, promoting could easily make a lot of corporations compete to each other. This would promote all the companies to produce more unique goods and lead to the development of the country’s economy. For example, I wanted to buy a phone and I went to a phone store. At there, I saw a variety kinds of phones; I chose Samsung A50 because of its beauty and its slight shape, so other phone’s firm should create the phone that have more functions and more attractive than A50 to catch the attention of the guests. Secondly, advertisements could be efficient in helping children making own dreams. For instance, the children could see a lot of career promotion in schools or in some buildings such as doctor, architecture, police, and the A boy may see being a doctor is cool so he have to study chemistry and biology, the B boy may say he want to be a police-officer because he wants to catch the crimes. It is very effective. Lastly, advertisement is helpful to inhabitants in making choice. People could make choice via the prices, the brand name, and the aspect of the items.
Nevertheless, there are some drawbacks of the advertisement. The accurateness and the quality of these advertisement is still not clear in some products, medicine specifically. For example, the advertisement said that you will lose weight if you drink the pink tablet. Some people did drink it. Consequently, they are not lose weight, but they first go to the hospital because of CKD which means the chronic kidney disease. That is super hazardous. Next, advertisements always look at the vision of the children and make them ask their parents for purchasing the items they want. When they get stuffs what they want, they would not do other activities.
In conclusion, promotion would bring more advantages than the drawbacks. It could make people pay more attention to the products which they sell. But, the quality of the goods should be verified precisely.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 790, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'A' is left.
Suggestion: the; A
...ch as doctor, architecture, police, and the A boy may see being a doctor is cool so h...
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Line 3, column 837, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'has'.
Suggestion: has
...oy may see being a doctor is cool so he have to study chemistry and biology, the B b...
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Line 3, column 895, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'wants'.
Suggestion: wants
...istry and biology, the B boy may say he want to be a police-officer because he wants...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...rand name, and the aspect of the items. Nevertheless, there are some drawbacks o...
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Line 5, column 98, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this advertisement' or 'these advertisements'?
Suggestion: this advertisement; these advertisements
...nt. The accurateness and the quality of these advertisement is still not clear in some products, me...
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Line 5, column 323, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'lost'.
Suggestion: lost
...id drink it. Consequently, they are not lose weight, but they first go to the hospit...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...nt, they would not do other activities. In conclusion, promotion would bring mor...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, if, lastly, look, may, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, still, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 7.85571142285 204% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 24.0651302605 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1902.0 1615.20841683 118% => OK
No of words: 392.0 315.596192385 124% => OK
Chars per words: 4.85204081633 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44960558625 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84552576301 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 176.041082164 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.543367346939 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 577.8 506.74238477 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 16.0721442886 149% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 64.84977298 49.4020404114 131% => OK
Chars per sentence: 79.25 106.682146367 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.3333333333 20.7667163134 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.75 7.06120827912 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.01903807615 139% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.67935871743 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 3.4128256513 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.12715920248 0.244688304435 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0350294584818 0.084324248473 42% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0385950244554 0.0667982634062 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0782384438218 0.151304729494 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0198879692112 0.056905535591 35% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.6 13.0946893788 73% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 50.2224549098 127% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 11.3001002004 74% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.55 12.4159519038 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.81 8.58950901804 91% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 78.4519038076 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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