Playing a musical instrument is one of the most important achievements for any child. To what extent do you agree with this statement?
The role of music in our life is still widely debated, with some people claiming it is indeed of paramount importance for children to master at least a music instrument. Personally, I agree with this statement, and I will explain why in this essay.
Firstly, playing music acts as a precursor to a child's mental development. it is true to argue that learning any musical instruments, let alone mastering one, is time-consuming, tedious and requires constant efforts. However,through the course of striving, children may inadvertently acquire patience and diligence,thus enhancing their complex problem-solving skills. Secondly, playing musical instruments is said to be a healthy way of entertainment. Compared to children who spend hours straining their eyes at computer or mobile phone screens, other who consider playing music a hobby are proved to rarely have to suffer from any types of eye disorders. Finally, strange as it may sound, when it comes to one's adolescence and adulthood, the ability of being mastered in any musical instruments can make him stand out of the crowd and draw admiration.
I do understand the opposing view ,which is that forcing a child to learn such tough thing as musical instruments from an early age may cause psychological injuries.With long tiring days of hard training for an instrument in the absence of any likelihood that he would be able to master it,there is no doubt that it will result in loss of confidence and self-belief. However,it is by no means clear that this always happen and can be fixed by a loosened timetable or consistent encouragements from teachers and parents.
To conclude, I believe that the ability of playing musical instruments is an excellent goal to strive for,especially with children at their early ages.this is as long as the learning instrument process is ensured to be a gradual process, based on careful support rather than undue pressure.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, firstly, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, still, thus, at least, no doubt, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1623.0 1615.20841683 100% => OK
No of words: 312.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.20192307692 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20279927342 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.13868142507 2.80592935109 112% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 176.041082164 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.608974358974 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 494.1 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.2975951904 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 86.0855810965 49.4020404114 174% => OK
Chars per sentence: 147.545454545 106.682146367 138% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.3636363636 20.7667163134 137% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.81818181818 7.06120827912 139% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.01903807615 219% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.31345435503 0.244688304435 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.115216233889 0.084324248473 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0607213998189 0.0667982634062 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.184781726027 0.151304729494 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.057443311856 0.056905535591 101% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.2 13.0946893788 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 50.2224549098 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.18 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.33 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 78.4519038076 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.1190380762 130% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.