Art is an expression of once feelings. some are of the opinion that government investing money on painting and music artists is waste of resources, this capital could be more beneficial in public services. I, however, do not agree with the former notion, the below paragraph will discuss my opinion with relevant examples.
In the contemporary society music is indispensable, ever individual regardless of his or her age group enjoys music of some kind. Furthermore, music for decades is considered to have a calming effect on a persons mental. For instance, a rewound business man named Elon musk, in his recent interview, said he listens to jazz music before every meeting, It helps his mind stay calm and relaxed. In addition to having a psychological influence over once mind, art is the for of expression that could speak to thousands. Paintings have been serving their purpose for centuries, and they have been adored by many in the modern times. A famous Spanish painter namely, Pablo Picasso through one of his paintings done in 1937 (Guernica) he expressed his feelings about world war 2, this was noticed by thousands and was one of the most popular paintings of the century, and this potentially curbed the war up to an extent just by one single painting.
In addition to artist being able to have a influential impact over the masses, their work can address some of the most notorious parts of the society. For instance, there was a art exhibition in the year 2015, where many art pieces addressed the impoverishment of people, by the government bureaucracy and corruption. Moreover, this exhibition got internationally recognized, and multipal NPO (non profit organization) promised to host this event withing their country.
Indubitably, art is imperative to humanity, as one can express his feelings through his work. Artist devote a lifetime to better portray their work, thereby, they must be financially looked after by the government. In my belief, they hold a pivotal role to play in the coming future, as they can be the voice of public.
To conclude, investing in public services could be a better investment, however, history has illuminated the importance of art. The impact it has over the public is deep and should be respected.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, however, if, look, moreover, so, for instance, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 54.0 41.998997996 129% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.3376753507 180% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1845.0 1615.20841683 114% => OK
No of words: 375.0 315.596192385 119% => OK
Chars per words: 4.92 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40055868397 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73999188969 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 176.041082164 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.546666666667 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 594.0 506.74238477 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 5.43587174349 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 1.0 16.0721442886 6% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 375.0 20.2975951904 1848% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 0.0 49.4020404114 0% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 1845.0 106.682146367 1729% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 375.0 20.7667163134 1806% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 71.0 7.06120827912 1005% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 8.67935871743 12% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0567420468985 0.244688304435 23% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0567420468985 0.084324248473 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0667982634062 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0334998307618 0.151304729494 22% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0309763782266 0.056905535591 54% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 189.2 13.0946893788 1445% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -309.15 50.2224549098 -616% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 0.0 7.44779559118 0% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 149.5 11.3001002004 1323% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 12.74 12.4159519038 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 26.41 8.58950901804 307% => Dale chall readability score is high.
difficult_words: 99.0 78.4519038076 126% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 56.0 9.78957915832 572% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 152.0 10.1190380762 1502% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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