At the present time the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults compared with the number of older people Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages

Throughout the last decades, there have been controversial problems on population’s age, which still remains heated up to present. It is unequivocal that adolescents, and young adults now outnumber any other age groups, especially people above 65. However, this seemingly beneficial sign arises a question that says: do population rejuvenation’s merits outweigh its counterpart ? In my opinion, the benefits of this issue outweighs the drawbacks.
On one hand, population rejuvenation offers people several drawbacks. One of them must be the deficiency of accomodation, by which i mean, there are various infants born in every single second; as a result, the demand for accomodation exponentially increases, the matter is that there will no longer suffer a lack of space for humans. It is common knowledge that land deficiency may result in an upsurge in the price of land, which many undergraduates, or even adults find challenging to find a place for living.
On the other hand, a relatively large number of young adults also means that a country has a great potential for development on each individual aspect. First of all, young adults demonstrate advanced capability of technical knowledge acquisition. It is clear that the new generation will bring about a technological revolution, or a leap to a cutting-edge age by experiencing and studying from their failure. Moreover, a great number of youngsters supply a source of labor, which is needed particularly in an industrial area with such an incredible amount of work. An exponential growth in population meets the demand for a large number of workers; thus, that country will witness advanced progress made by young adults’ hard work.
To be honest, a broadly large number of adolescents, or so-called population rejuvenation brings several merits, while there are only a few drawbacks. As my essay regards both advantages and disadvantages, it is now clear to announce that population rejuvenation does have a beneficial impact on national development.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, may, moreover, second, so, still, thus, while, i mean, as a result, first of all, in my opinion, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.3376753507 192% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1706.0 1615.20841683 106% => OK
No of words: 317.0 315.596192385 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.38170347003 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21953715646 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.25118302354 2.80592935109 116% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 176.041082164 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.599369085174 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 532.8 506.74238477 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 7.0 2.52805611222 277% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.0238036216 49.4020404114 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.857142857 106.682146367 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6428571429 20.7667163134 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.71428571429 7.06120827912 138% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.250437103314 0.244688304435 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0812653520806 0.084324248473 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0583149247155 0.0667982634062 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.133060061747 0.151304729494 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0667089338417 0.056905535591 117% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 13.0946893788 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.22 12.4159519038 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.21 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 78.4519038076 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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