At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of old people.Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?

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At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of old people.
Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?

Currently, the world population has been rapidly growing, and in some nations, the number of young adults has significantly surpassed the number of older ones. In my opinion, this development will bring more positive consequences than negative outcomes.

It is true that governments have to spend additional efforts to support the prompt growth of young generations. Facilities, such as tertiary institutions and sport centers, need to be quickly established in a short time period to meet young citizens’ need, and those constructions require a large demand in finance. In addition, excessive young workforce means a tougher competition in the employment. As a result, some young people will face the menace of failing to find a job in the future, which will harm their life quality and self-confidence.

On the other hand, the expansion of young population also offers multiple benefits to the society. First of all, it can increase a country’s chance of wining a worldwide sports game, as it is widely known that the most competitive sports players always come from the younger ones. Also, having more young individuals also can enhance a nation’s defense capability, since the country will always have enough people to serve in the army. Furthermore, a region’s domestic economy will also be boosted, if this nation have sufficient and productive workforce to meet its labor market.

In conclusion, although the growing trend of young population will add extra financial burden on the governments, yet it will also make it more difficult for individuals to find a position in the job market. However, this tendency is instrumental in improving a nation’s reputation, safety and economy situation. Therefore, the upsides of this development overshadow its downsides.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
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Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.3376753507 168% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1526.0 1615.20841683 94% => OK
No of words: 280.0 315.596192385 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.45 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09062348924 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.16972283601 2.80592935109 113% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 176.041082164 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.6 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 475.2 506.74238477 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.6660190126 49.4020404114 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.384615385 106.682146367 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5384615385 20.7667163134 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.4615384615 7.06120827912 176% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.146932365557 0.244688304435 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0521126043057 0.084324248473 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0447557115432 0.0667982634062 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0968773267934 0.151304729494 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0452335379835 0.056905535591 79% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 50.2224549098 83% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.33 12.4159519038 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.7 8.58950901804 113% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 78.4519038076 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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