With the pressures on today’s young people to succeed academically, some people believe that non-academic subjects at school (eg: physical education and cookery) should be removed from the syllabus so that children can concentrate wholly on academic subjects. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Students today are under pressure to be academically successful; therefore, some people assume schools should exclude non-academic subjects to benefit students' academic performances. In my opinion, I disagree with this idea because studying these subjects can bring valuable advantages to students.
Firstly, non-academic subjects can lessen students' possibility of back health issues. To be specific, some students may have bad postures and back pain because of spending too much time staying in one position during classes. Therefore, learning subjects such as physical exercise could prevent students from back pain and incorrect postures because it encourages them to exercise and do sports. Researchers from a university in the UK have proved that physical education could improve back health for students, as it prevents students from stiffness after long hours of sitting and allows more time for students to do sports.
Moreover, non-academic subjects can play a role as a means of relaxation for students after stressful lessons. Many students could feel mentally tired after nerve-racking classes and experience a mental breakdown when receiving a bad test result. With the help of subjects such as arts and physical education, they could divert their attention from stressful thoughts and refresh their minds, which would significantly improve students' mental health. According to a research article from a university in China, the number of students experiencing academic burnout has decreased by 10% by learning non-academic subjects with proper instructions from teachers.
In conclusion, non-academic lessons are a crucial part of a student's academic life as they can strengthen back health and help relieve stress from academic pressure. Therefore, despite some approvals of keeping only academic subjects, I disapprove of removing these subjects from the school syllabus.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 59, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a student' or simply 'students'?
Suggestion: a student; students
...-academic lessons are a crucial part of a students academic life as they can strengthen ba...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, if, may, moreover, so, then, therefore, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 13.1623246493 30% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 24.0651302605 58% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1611.0 1615.20841683 100% => OK
No of words: 281.0 315.596192385 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.73309608541 5.12529762239 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09427095027 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92835642238 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 159.0 176.041082164 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.565836298932 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 484.2 506.74238477 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.0948004179 49.4020404114 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.25 106.682146367 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.4166666667 20.7667163134 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.75 7.06120827912 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.357091342506 0.244688304435 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.155055676429 0.084324248473 184% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.115196627463 0.0667982634062 172% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.265449402515 0.151304729494 175% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.101405831567 0.056905535591 178% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.3 13.0946893788 132% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 50.2224549098 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.25 12.4159519038 131% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.39 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 78.4519038076 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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