With the pressures on today’s young people to succeed academically, some people believe that non-academic subjects at school (eg: physical education and cookery) should be removed from the syllabus so that children can concentrate wholly on academic subjects. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Students today are under pressure to be academically successful; therefore, some people assume schools should exclude non-academic subjects to benefit students' academic performances. In my opinion, I disagree with this idea because studying these subjects can bring valuable advantages to students.
Firstly, non-academic subjects can lessen the possibility of back health issues for students. To be specific, some students may have bad postures and back pain because of spending too much time staying in one position during classes. Therefore, learning subjects such as physical exercise could prevent students from back pain and incorrect postures because it encourages them to exercise and do sports. Researchers from a university in the UK have proved that physical education could improve back health for students, as it prevents students from stiffness after long hours of sitting and allows more time for students to do sports.
Moreover, non-academic subjects can play a role as a means of relaxation for students after stressful lessons. Many students could feel mentally tired after nerve-racking classes and experience a mental breakdown when receiving a bad test result. With the help of subjects such as arts and physical education, they could divert their attention from stressful thoughts and refresh their minds, which would significantly improve students' mental health. According to a research article from a university in China, the number of students experiencing academic burnout has decreased by 10% by learning non-academic subjects with proper instructions from teachers.
In conclusion, non-academic lessons are a crucial part of students' academic life as they can strengthen back health and help relieve stress from academic pressure. Therefore, I disagree with the removal of these subjects from school syllabus.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, if, may, moreover, so, then, therefore, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 13.1623246493 30% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 24.0651302605 58% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1567.0 1615.20841683 97% => OK
No of words: 275.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.69818181818 5.12529762239 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07223819929 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91840327679 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 153.0 176.041082164 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.556363636364 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 468.0 506.74238477 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.159144995 49.4020404114 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.583333333 106.682146367 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.9166666667 20.7667163134 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.75 7.06120827912 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.351867520111 0.244688304435 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.152154025014 0.084324248473 180% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.113126501516 0.0667982634062 169% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.26476734987 0.151304729494 175% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.100705015609 0.056905535591 177% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.9 13.0946893788 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.08 12.4159519038 130% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.15 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 78.4519038076 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 17.0 10.7795591182 158% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, if, may, moreover, so, then, therefore, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 13.1623246493 30% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 24.0651302605 58% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1567.0 1615.20841683 97% => OK
No of words: 275.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.69818181818 5.12529762239 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07223819929 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91840327679 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 153.0 176.041082164 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.556363636364 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 468.0 506.74238477 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.159144995 49.4020404114 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.583333333 106.682146367 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.9166666667 20.7667163134 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.75 7.06120827912 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.351867520111 0.244688304435 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.152154025014 0.084324248473 180% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.113126501516 0.0667982634062 169% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.26476734987 0.151304729494 175% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.100705015609 0.056905535591 177% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.9 13.0946893788 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.08 12.4159519038 130% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.15 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 78.4519038076 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 17.0 10.7795591182 158% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.