The prevention of health problems and illness is more important than treatment and medicine. Government funding should reflect this. To what extent do you agree?

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The prevention of health problems and illness is more important than treatment and medicine. Government funding should reflect this. To what extent do you agree?

It is often argued that Government funds ought to use for preventing health issues and illness from occurring as opposed to focusing on cures and medicine. I completely disagree with this view because some diseases are incurable and need treatment. I believe funding for new medicines should be made a priority.

To begin with, following a healthy lifestyle such as eating the right food, keeping fit and staying in shape is certainly beneficial to health and preventing illness. Nonetheless, there are some diseases that are incurable and occur based on genetics, such as cancer. For example, my uncle led a very active and healthy lifestyle, did not smoke and had a good diet, however, he developed lung cancer when he was 65 years old. Therefore, I hold the view that finding new ways to treat these kinds of illnesses is in need of consistent funding which the government has a responsibility to budget for.

Secondly, In many countries there is desperate need of investment in healthcare especially for the development of new ways to combat serious diseases such as Parkinson’s disease. To illustrate this, in the USA over the past two decades there has been huge advances in the treatment of Parkinson’s with new types of medicine, which was the result of many years of investment by administrations. If the government in other countries had this at the top of their agenda then I believe that many more terrible illnesses could be cured with cutting edge medicine within the next decade.

To conclude, although some argue that Government money needs to be set aside for the prevention of health problems rather than medicine and treatment. I firmly believe that funds need to be used for the treatment of serious diseases and the development of better medicine.

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2019-07-06 Ajay Naykar 73 view

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 405, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...years of investment by administrations. If the government in other countries had t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, nonetheless, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, for example, such as, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1492.0 1615.20841683 92% => OK
No of words: 296.0 315.596192385 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.04054054054 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14784890444 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91315747712 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 176.041082164 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.564189189189 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 468.0 506.74238477 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.1798564148 49.4020404114 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.333333333 106.682146367 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.6666666667 20.7667163134 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.33333333333 7.06120827912 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.214840224929 0.244688304435 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0825397408392 0.084324248473 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0641133213427 0.0667982634062 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.14856538198 0.151304729494 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0658980224273 0.056905535591 116% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.25 12.4159519038 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.51 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 78.4519038076 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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