Q11 Many animal species in the world are becoming extinct nowadays. Some people say that countries and individuals should protect these animals from dying out, while others say we should concentrate more on problems of human beings. Discuss both views and give your opinion. (
Recently, the conservation of animals has become the subject of heated debate. Some people assert that governments as well as the public should not allow animals to disappear, while others argue otherwise. I wholeheartedly agree with the latter stand. In the following essay, both views will be discussed before a conclusion is reached with my opinion.
On the one hand, those who claim that both individuals and society should protect animals do so for several reasons. Proponents of this argument insist that preventing animals from becoming extinct plays an important role in keeping biodiversity that is invaluable. Furthermore, if it were not for saving endangered animals, the original form of the food chain and ecosystem would be broken because of the extinction of a myriad of species, which could have a negative impact on humans who are on the top of food chains. Given these points, some people hold the view that not only governments but also people should make a concerted effort in order to preserve animals.
My opinion, however, is that there are a number of important global issues which more emphasis should be placed on than conserving animals given that preserving them is not directly related to people's daily life. Perhaps the most pressing problem which takes precedence over the protection of animals is global warming because it poses a threat to people's well-being. To be more specific, a large number of citizens across the globe suffer from global warming which even leads to climate change that exerts a detrimental influence on the quality of life. Another grave issue is global hunger since it is directly related to the life of humans. As a brief illustration, an article released by the Seoul Times illustrates that approximately 18% of people in the world died due to poverty in 2015. In light of the above, I find these more persuasive.
In conclusion, it is undeniable that there are a variety of opinions about this topic. However, after considering this matter in a careful manner, I fully support the view that devoting an astronomical amount of money to animal protection is undesirable for the reasons discussed above.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 390, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...eoples well-being. To be more specific, a large number of citizens across the globe suffer from g...
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Line 7, column 127, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a careful manner" with adverb for "careful"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
... However, after considering this matter in a careful manner, I fully support the view that devoting...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, so, well, while, in conclusion, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 10.4138276553 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 17.0 7.30460921844 233% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 41.998997996 126% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1813.0 1615.20841683 112% => OK
No of words: 357.0 315.596192385 113% => OK
Chars per words: 5.07843137255 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34677393335 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75685187302 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 176.041082164 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.588235294118 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 579.6 506.74238477 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.1214440906 49.4020404114 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.3125 106.682146367 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3125 20.7667163134 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.9375 7.06120827912 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.314440040932 0.244688304435 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0872715711718 0.084324248473 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0579640290908 0.0667982634062 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.171485015246 0.151304729494 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0606360750677 0.056905535591 107% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 13.0946893788 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.48 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.06 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 78.4519038076 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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