Q11 Many animal species in the world are becoming extinct nowadays. Some people say that countries and individuals should protect these animals from dying out, while others say we should concentrate more on problems of human beings. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Recently, animal protection has become the subject of heated debate. Some people assert that dealing with issues of humans should take precedence over the conservation of animals, while others argue otherwise. Personally, I wholeheartedly agree with the former stance. In the following essay, both views will be discussed before a conclusion is reached with my opinion.
On the one hand, those who claim that mankind should prevent numerous species of animals from being extinct do so for several reasons. Proponents of this argument insist that humans benefit a great deal from animal conservation given that the preservation of animals plays a vital role in keeping biodiversity. To provide a hypothetical example, if a large number of endangered species of animals disappear, the food chain and ecosystem would be destroyed, which would exert a detrimental influence on human beings who are on the top of the food chain.
My opinion, however, is that more emphasis should be placed on combating contemporary problems related to human beings than protecting animals. Perhaps the most pressing problem is global warming that can even give rise to climate change given that it causes damage to the quality of life. Thus, if human beings mitigate the speed of global warming, a myriad of citizens across the globe would be more likely to have an improved standard of living. Another graving issue is global hunger since it is directly linked to humans' lives. As a brief illustration, according to an article released by the Seoul Times, approximately 17 % of the world's population died out due to the poverty. In light of the above, I find these more persuasive.
In conclusion, it is undeniable that there are a variety of opinions about this topic. However, after considering this matter in a careful manner, I fully support the view that solving problems of human beings should take priority over hindering animals from going extinct for the reasons discussed above.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 350, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
.... To provide a hypothetical example, if a large number of endangered species of animals disappear...
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Line 5, column 638, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'worlds'' or 'world's'?
Suggestion: worlds'; world's
... Seoul Times, approximately 17 % of the worlds population died out due to the poverty....
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Line 7, column 127, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a careful manner" with adverb for "careful"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
... However, after considering this matter in a careful manner, I fully support the view that solving ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, so, thus, while, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 1.0 10.4138276553 10% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 41.998997996 124% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1657.0 1615.20841683 103% => OK
No of words: 320.0 315.596192385 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.178125 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22948505376 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74969019854 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 176.041082164 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.628125 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 524.7 506.74238477 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.1238908021 49.4020404114 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.466666667 106.682146367 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3333333333 20.7667163134 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.86666666667 7.06120827912 41% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.342332911735 0.244688304435 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0947724842205 0.084324248473 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0644312866488 0.0667982634062 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.187705220593 0.151304729494 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0177295847055 0.056905535591 31% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 13.0946893788 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.76 12.4159519038 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.71 8.58950901804 113% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 78.4519038076 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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