Q11 : Many animal species in the world are becoming extinct nowadays. Some people say that countries and individuals should protect these animals from dying out, while others say we should concentrate more on problems of human beings. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Recently, the conservation of animals has become the subject of heated debate. Some people assert that dealing with contemporary issues of humans should take precedence over preserving animals, while others argue otherwise. Personally, I wholeheartedly agree with the former stance. In the following essay, both views will be discussed before a conclusion is reached with my opinion.
On the one hand, those who claim that mankind should not allow animals to go extinct do so for several reasons. Proponents of this argument insist that preventing animals from disappearing plays a vital role in keeping biodiversy that is invaluable. In addition, to provide a hypothetical example, if it were not for making an effort to save animal, the food chain and ecosystem would be broken duet to the disappearance of numerous endangered species of wildlife, which exerts a detrimental influence on human beings who are on the top of the food chain.
My opinion, however, is that in modern society, there are a number of important global issues which more emphasis should be placed on than the protection of animals given that prohibiting animals from dying out is not directly related to individuals' daily life. Perhaps the most pressing problem is global warming because it causes harm to people's well-being. To be more specific, a myriad of citizens across the globe suffer from the impact of global warming that even results in climate change. Another grave issue is global hunger as it is directly related to the life of humans. As a brief illustration, according to an article released by the Seoul Times, approximately 17% of the world's population died in 2010 due to poverty. In light of the above, I find these more persuasive.
In conclusion, it is undeniable that there are a variety of opinions about this topic. However, after considering this matter in a careful manner, I fully support the view that preserving animals should not be a priority for the reasons discussed above.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, so, well, while, in addition, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 1.0 10.4138276553 10% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 41.998997996 129% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1666.0 1615.20841683 103% => OK
No of words: 326.0 315.596192385 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.11042944785 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24917287072 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8361346767 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 176.041082164 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.616564417178 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 533.7 506.74238477 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 68.3091013946 49.4020404114 138% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.066666667 106.682146367 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.7333333333 20.7667163134 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.73333333333 7.06120827912 53% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.30890130149 0.244688304435 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0795661343681 0.084324248473 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0616923885793 0.0667982634062 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.157349590628 0.151304729494 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0353821694952 0.056905535591 62% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 13.0946893788 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.57 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 78.4519038076 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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