Q16 In some countries, the difference in age between parents and children is generally greater than it was in the past. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?
Recently, the issue of the age gap between parents and children has become the subject of heated debate. Some people assert that although there are some advantages to giving birth babies at an early age, these are exceeded by the disadvantages, while others argue otherwise. Personally, I wholeheartedly agree with the former stance. In the following essay, both views will be discussed before a conclusion is reached with my opinion.
On the one hand, those who claim that having children as early in life as possible exerts a positive influence on families do so for several reasons. Proponents of this argument insist that young people raising their children are more likely to participate in various leisure activities with their offspring, such as football and online games, which enables them to build strong relationship with one another. In addition, not only can younger parents communicate with their children with greater ease, but they are also easily capable of empathising with their children considering that they have a predisposition to be more open-minded than older parents who are generally more strict due to a larger generation gap.
My opinion, however, is that the drawbacks of taking responsibility for becoming parents at a young age are more significant. Perhaps the principal disadvantage is that young people who look after their children often struggle to support their living costs given that they have not saved a huge amount of money as the majority of them do not have enough work experience. Therefore, younger parents often have difficulty providing invaluable opportunities, such as a high quality of education, for their children. Furthermore, younger parents may have a negative impact on the development of their children's personality. This means that younger parents who are generally less mature due to a lack of life experience may be incapable of setting a good example to their children, which can even lead children to become immature and selfish.
In conclusion, it is undeniable that there are a variety of opinions about this topic. However, after considering this matter in a careful manner, I fully support the view that the drawbacks of the narrow age gap between parents and children surpass the benefits for the reasons discussed above.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, look, may, so, therefore, while, in addition, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 16.0 7.30460921844 219% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 35.0 24.0651302605 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 41.998997996 119% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1932.0 1615.20841683 120% => OK
No of words: 368.0 315.596192385 117% => OK
Chars per words: 5.25 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37987740619 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84882159832 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 176.041082164 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.554347826087 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 617.4 506.74238477 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 71.4899736084 49.4020404114 145% => OK
Chars per sentence: 138.0 106.682146367 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.2857142857 20.7667163134 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.5 7.06120827912 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.19181174029 0.244688304435 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0672204449026 0.084324248473 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0482689657547 0.0667982634062 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.117709486603 0.151304729494 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0205197895322 0.056905535591 36% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.4 13.0946893788 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.63 50.2224549098 73% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 11.3001002004 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.47 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.09 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 78.4519038076 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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