QQ8 As countries develop more and more people buy and use their own cars Do you think the advantages of this trend for individuals outweigh the disadvantages for the environment

Essay topics:

QQ8 : As countries develop, more and more people buy and use their own cars. Do you think the advantages of this trend for individuals outweigh the disadvantages for the environment?

Recently, whether an increase in the number of cars is beneficial or not has become the subject of heated debate. Some people assert that although there are a number of disadvantages to making use of cars for the environment, these are outweighed by the advantages for humans, while others argue otherwise. And I wholeheartedly agree with the former stand. In the following essay, both views will be discussed before a conclusion is reached with my opinion.

On the one hand, those who claim that a growth in the number of cars poses a threat to the environment do so for several reasons. Proponents of this argument insist that a huge amount of CO2 is released by using cars, exerting a detrimental influence on the quality of air. In other words, excessive car usage results in air pollution that often prevents humans as well as animals from living a better life. Moreover, numerous wildlife species that should be protected in order to keep biodiversity can become extinct considering that a large quantity of CO2 can accelerate the speed of global warming, which can even lead to climate change.

My opinion, however, is that the masses can reap a myriad of benefits from having their cars. In fact, owning a car facilitates various aspects of people's daily life, from taking trips to commuting. To be more specific, private vehicles make it possible for users to travel to work with greater ease given that passengers of public transports, including subways and buses, often spend a huge amount of time. This is because public transport is sometimes not only unavailable but also crowded. In addition, individuals’ cars are more likely to minimize their inconvenience during their travel since they do not need to take into account problems related to public transport systems, such as being limited to fixed routes and timetables. In light of the above, I find these more persuasive.

In conclusion, it is undeniable that there are a variety of opinions about this topic. However, after considering this matter in a careful manner, I fully support the view that the benefits of a rise in the number of cars for people surpass the drawbacks for the environment for the reasons discussed above.

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Average: 8.9 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, moreover, so, well, while, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, such as, as well as, in other words

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 41.998997996 148% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1845.0 1615.20841683 114% => OK
No of words: 370.0 315.596192385 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.98648648649 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38581623665 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75180928595 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 176.041082164 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.6 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 590.4 506.74238477 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.76152304609 210% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.7858891152 49.4020404114 125% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.3125 106.682146367 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.125 20.7667163134 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.6875 7.06120827912 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.29545829522 0.244688304435 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0767046256343 0.084324248473 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0753402717198 0.0667982634062 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.165803943756 0.151304729494 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0444559855877 0.056905535591 78% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 13.0946893788 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.96 12.4159519038 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.22 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 78.4519038076 133% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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