as a result of electronic inventions such as the computer and television, people do less physical activity, and this is having a negative effect on their health.
to what extent do you agree or disagree?
having some kinds of modern technology such as the computer and television affects on prople's fitness and they are prone to have health problems. Despite some benefits of inventions, I think that they have more bad outcomes.
There are two main reasons to support electronic facilities. Firstly, watching entertaining programs which have several slim models or muscular actors inspires audiences to imitate. As we are human beings, we tend to feel envy good-looking models and want to have a great body like them. This will encourage people to do more exercises. Secondly, there are lots of sport and training programs motivating viewers to do physical activities. Some people may accidentally watch a short training program and they want to follow instructions. For instance, I used to surf on the internet and I found a video named 5 minutes to lose weight. I kept following the instructions because I wanted to try it.
On the other hand, being addicted to the inventions leads to have health problems. Firstly, staying at home and watching tv programs may lead to be a cough potato. More and more people are addicted to watching tv and they do not want to have outdoor activities. So, they will certainly have medical problems. Secondly, A number of people spend lots of time to entertain themselves. They have no more time to have sports. Apart from that, it is possible to do online shopping both on the internet and tv. this will make people feel more lazy and have too much comfort. They do not need to walk or going outside.
In conclusion, although having modern inventions benefits in some aspects, it causes people to have laziness and do less sports or activities to keep them fit.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Having
having some kinds of modern technology such as...
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Line 7, column 117, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun sports is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...t causes people to have laziness and do less sports or activities to keep them fit.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, look, may, second, secondly, so, apart from, for instance, i think, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.3376753507 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1415.0 1615.20841683 88% => OK
No of words: 289.0 315.596192385 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.89619377163 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12310562562 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68011787285 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 176.041082164 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.56401384083 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 434.7 506.74238477 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 5.43587174349 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 16.0721442886 124% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.2975951904 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.7968551904 49.4020404114 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 70.75 106.682146367 66% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.45 20.7667163134 70% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.25 7.06120827912 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.220619884507 0.244688304435 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.069756439324 0.084324248473 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0548074324668 0.0667982634062 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.144891845572 0.151304729494 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0301125860155 0.056905535591 53% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.9 13.0946893788 68% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 50.2224549098 131% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 11.3001002004 67% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.55 12.4159519038 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.77 8.58950901804 90% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 78.4519038076 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.1190380762 75% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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