School is considered the second home where an individual can gather knowledge and learn various skills which complements a person as a whole. The main matter of concern is whether Educational institute should remove extra curricular activities such as art and music or not, so that students can focus on subjects which are advantageous. I totally disagree with his statement as its not only studies which lead to a brighter future, there are versatile fields demanding different skills. This essay will brief you about few points supporting my view with relatable examples.
Bookish knowledge has not always proved to be essential behind the success of ones life. There are many opportunities which demands extra ordinary skills to achieve a milestone. Schools should always encourage students to showcase their talent in arts, music and many more. Educational centres should understand that overall development is must to gain a better place in future. To exemplify, an eminent football player, ronaldo have always faced red marks in his curriculum but his hard work and passion towards sport lead him to a peak.
People always demand changes and thus there should be variation in children's learning. Theories sometimes bores students so as a form of refreshment they should be involved in extra curricular activities. Even such activities enhance the development of brain and increase creativity in them.
I am of the opinion that schools must include art and music as a part of their curriculum as it is not a concern regarding the focus on academic syllabus. Its totally on the choice of an individual on basis of his or her potential in different areas.
- Some countries today have passed laws against smoking tobacco in public places such as office and restaurants, other countries have not attention of doing this.Discuss both views and give opinion 22
- The role of education is to prepare children for the modern world. Schools should cut art and music out of the curriculum so that children can focus on useful subjects such as information technology.To what extent do you agree? 78
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, regarding, second, so, thus, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 41.998997996 74% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1401.0 1615.20841683 87% => OK
No of words: 271.0 315.596192385 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.16974169742 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.05734859645 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76954907728 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.608856088561 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 435.6 506.74238477 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.3482316926 49.4020404114 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.071428571 106.682146367 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3571428571 20.7667163134 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.21428571429 7.06120827912 46% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.176221122157 0.244688304435 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0540625462742 0.084324248473 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0585919860612 0.0667982634062 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.101285418267 0.151304729494 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0261282421591 0.056905535591 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 13.0946893788 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.89 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 78.4519038076 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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