The role of education is to prepare children for the modern world. Schools should cut art and music out of the curriculum so that children can focus on useful subjects such as information technology.
To what extent do you agree?
It is true that school’s pivotal function is to adjust children with outer world. It is considered that subjects such as arts and music should be discarded as they are not relevant in this technological world. From my perspective, although, we have to prioritize science ant digital technology classes at schools, art and music should not be neglected.
To begin with, the statement that art and music should be removed has some compelling reasons. We live in fast-changing technological era and it is reasonable to concentrate children’s enthusiasm and attention to more contemporary subjects, which would be useful for them and society as well. Indeed, in real life they are expected to confront and solve numerous problems such as how to combat some stubborn diseases or overcome traffic problems, which have become prominent issue in many countries. Therefor it would be effective to dive children into more prosperous subjects in order to solve existing and upcoming challenges.
To continue with, in spite of great deal of technological problems that we have, human being is emotional and social creature and artistic classes are vital for our rounded development. Music an art has been with us for long time and it has been proven that it impacts on brain development significantly. For instance, recent survey conducted by group of neuroscientists from the USA illustrates, that during drawing or singing the part of the children’s brain responsible for communicating and critical thinking activates remarkable. Hence, it would be unwise to remove art and music from subject list as they stimulate brain to perform better.
To conclude, undoubtedly school’s prime mission is to equip children with basic knowledge that they have to implement in later life. It is believed that, music and art subjects should be removed as they are redundant in today’s digital era. From my point, although, we have to prioritize digital subjects, music and art sessions should not be eradicated from school curriculum.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
hence, if, so, thus, well, for instance, such as, in spite of, it is true, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 13.1623246493 167% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 10.4138276553 163% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1724.0 1615.20841683 107% => OK
No of words: 322.0 315.596192385 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.35403726708 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23607819155 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.09524986668 2.80592935109 110% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.549689440994 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 525.6 506.74238477 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.3510233384 49.4020404114 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.142857143 106.682146367 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0 20.7667163134 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.28571428571 7.06120827912 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.207039872832 0.244688304435 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.084765715561 0.084324248473 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0398318856953 0.0667982634062 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.145312442507 0.151304729494 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0336605650163 0.056905535591 59% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 13.0946893788 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.05 12.4159519038 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.48 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 78.4519038076 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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