School should be a safe environment for learning and developing, however, school violence seems to be increasing. Where does this problem come from? What should we do to change the situation?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience
School has always been a secure environment for students to gain knowledge and develop their personal aspects. However, it is evident that school violence is on the rise. This serious problem can occur in many forms, ranging from physical violence to psychological violence, which is commonly expressed through acts of bullying, intimidation and repression. On the whole, violence in schools creates insecurity and fear which harm the general school climate and infringe pupils’ right to learn in an unthreatening environment.
There are some main factors which lead to school violence. Adults often blame uncensored images and videos on social media for being the chief culprit behind school violence. The blooming development of science and technology means that social media is increasingly becoming a part of youth’s culture. In recent years, social media proves to be an innovative space for sharing information, but it also brings violence to the young generation somehow. We can easily see photos or videos of school violence posted nearly everyday. The television is full of brutal images of shooting and killing scenes. This explains why children who view those are tend to imitate them. Moreover, violent video games contribute to school violence as much as the violent social media does. The line between reality and fantasy nearly seems invisible, so children can inadvertently absorb violence as a normal thing.
Another factor leading to this situation is because of the school’s overly-lenient rules. As a result, students who often bully their peers will have a chance to bully them over and over again. Teachers usually just stop the fights but don't educate their students properly so that they will not relapse. But not only students show brutality to their mates but there have been events in which teacher insulted or even fought student, they absolutely harmed both physical and mental status of students, and this is a huge drawback of our educational system these days.
So what should we do to stop school violence? The first and foremost recommendation is to raise extensive knowledge about the negative impact of school violence to students. About the effects of media, we can reduce violence by letting the competent authorities to control the content more strictly. Also, it is parents’ responsibility to educate their children, starting by being good role models. Parents should talk to their children, ask them about their thoughts and fears, to make sure that they are not suffering from any kind of bullying... On school aspect, school should be a safe environment for students to get knowledge and perfect personality. Teachers and staff should not only teach students but also support and guide them to have the right awareness. They need to be a safe place for students whenever they have troubles with their friends at school. If everyone gives a hand to help reducing school violence, we can prevent this problem.
In conclusion, there are various repercussions regarding school violence, yet, this serious problem can be solved once according measures are enlisted imperatively.
- School should be a safe environment for learning and developing however school violence seems to be increasing Where does this problem come from What should we do to change the situation Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from 78
- School should be a safe environment for learning and developing however school violence seems to be increasing Where does this problem come from What should we do to change the situation Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from 78
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 520, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...videos of school violence posted nearly everyday. The television is full of brutal image...
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Line 2, column 648, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'tended'.
Suggestion: tended
...xplains why children who view those are tend to imitate them. Moreover, violent vide...
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Line 3, column 237, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...achers usually just stop the fights but dont educate their students properly so that...
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Line 4, column 902, Rule ID: ADVISE_VBG[5]
Message: The verb 'help' is used with infinitive: 'to reduce' or 'reduce'.
Suggestion: to reduce; reduce
...chool. If everyone gives a hand to help reducing school violence, we can prevent this pr...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, moreover, regarding, so, in conclusion, in fact, kind of, as a result, on the whole
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 13.1623246493 167% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 10.4138276553 221% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 24.0651302605 154% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 41.998997996 140% => OK
Nominalization: 25.0 8.3376753507 300% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2633.0 1615.20841683 163% => OK
No of words: 498.0 315.596192385 158% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.28714859438 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72397222731 4.20363070211 112% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71744325252 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 279.0 176.041082164 158% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.560240963855 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 792.9 506.74238477 156% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 16.0721442886 168% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.7687550264 49.4020404114 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.5185185185 106.682146367 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4444444444 20.7667163134 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.22222222222 7.06120827912 60% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 18.0 3.9879759519 451% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.321449404964 0.244688304435 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0900654209162 0.084324248473 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0734244206048 0.0667982634062 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.17041972888 0.151304729494 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0932543317146 0.056905535591 164% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 13.0946893788 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.4 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.13 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 145.0 78.4519038076 185% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.