school should be a safe environment for learning and developing. however, school violence seems to be increasing. where does this problem come from? what should we do to change the situation? give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
despite being believed as the most harmonious as well as the safest places, there are more and more educational institutions have recently witnessed the increase of dramctic school violence. this essay will suggest some of the main reasons whcih are hiding behind this alarming trend.
there are numerous causes of the surge of school violence which have brought about lots of consequences. in the one hand, violence is likely to be considered as coming from fueling by dysfunctional family dynamics may result in the same behaviors of teenagers when interacting with others, especially their peers or vulnerable people. not only the worrying impact of dysfunctional family but the rapid developnet of the technology, especially the internet has been seen as the main contributor to this dangerous trend. being at a vulnerable and impressionable age, teenage students are exposed to gory scenes form movies or even reality life may experience increased desensitization to violence and likely to have more aggressive actions.
on the other hand, to deal with the increase in violence, several practical sp;utions can be adopted to curb this situation. in the first place, a nurturing and healthy domestic environment is crucial for children's proper psychological development. to be more specific, parents need to hinder conflicts and make an efforts in creating a supportive upbriging process for their children. meanwhile, governments and local authorities ought to enforce censorship policies in order to minimize teenagers'exposure to violent scenes. in particular, they should enact stricter rules on posting brutal content on the mass media and fighting scenes featuring aggressive behaviors should be banned on those social networks as well. besides, both families and community need to educate children on how to use social networks directly or avoiding negative content.
in conclusion, dysfunctional family dynamics and media consumptions are accountable for growing violence at school. therefore, parents need to take responsibility for nurturing a supportive family atmosphere and the authorities need to impose stric censorship policies on blood-curdling scenes.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, first, if, may, so, therefore, well, while, in conclusion, in particular, as well as, in the first place, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 7.30460921844 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 8.0 24.0651302605 33% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1849.0 1615.20841683 114% => OK
No of words: 327.0 315.596192385 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.65443425076 5.12529762239 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25242769721 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.13298237491 2.80592935109 112% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 176.041082164 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.608562691131 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 584.1 506.74238477 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.1484863069 49.4020404114 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.071428571 106.682146367 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.3571428571 20.7667163134 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.78571428571 7.06120827912 139% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 16.0 5.01903807615 319% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.9879759519 226% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.206446079627 0.244688304435 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0633039328611 0.084324248473 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0357733454827 0.0667982634062 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.114227364988 0.151304729494 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0135747816324 0.056905535591 24% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.9 13.0946893788 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 31.21 50.2224549098 62% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 11.3001002004 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.79 12.4159519038 127% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.33 8.58950901804 120% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 78.4519038076 147% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...ave brought about lots of consequences. in the one hand, violence is likely to be ...
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...drens proper psychological development. to be more specific, parents need to hinde...
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...untable for growing violence at school. therefore, parents need to take responsibility fo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, first, if, may, so, therefore, well, while, in conclusion, in particular, as well as, in the first place, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 7.30460921844 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 8.0 24.0651302605 33% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1849.0 1615.20841683 114% => OK
No of words: 327.0 315.596192385 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.65443425076 5.12529762239 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25242769721 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.13298237491 2.80592935109 112% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 176.041082164 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.608562691131 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 584.1 506.74238477 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.1484863069 49.4020404114 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.071428571 106.682146367 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.3571428571 20.7667163134 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.78571428571 7.06120827912 139% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 16.0 5.01903807615 319% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.9879759519 226% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.206446079627 0.244688304435 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0633039328611 0.084324248473 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0357733454827 0.0667982634062 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.114227364988 0.151304729494 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0135747816324 0.056905535591 24% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.9 13.0946893788 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 31.21 50.2224549098 62% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 11.3001002004 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.79 12.4159519038 127% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.33 8.58950901804 120% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 78.4519038076 147% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.