Shopping is the favorite pastime for most of the young people. Why do you think is that? Do you think they should be encouraged to do some other useful activities?
It is commonly believed that shopping is the popular activity the youngsters spend spare time on. From my perspective, the reasons which lead to that trend are the desirement to be satisfied and enhance their own self-esteem. However, there are many other things worth doing rather than shopping.
Purchasing items provides young customers with mentalistic fulfillment as a result of coverage marketing. A huge number of eye-catching advertisements on television and social media are attributed to draw the young’s attention to purchase. Whenever they take money out of the pocket, they will feel satisfactory for having fulfilled their needs and adore themselves more. In addition, more and more young clients spend means for leisure because of the rapid development of electronic commercial marketplace, which forces people to spend more time surfing their websites with a diversed range of products and many bargains, especially in the period of Covid-19 outbreak when people have to stay at home more. Besides, young people whose low self-esteem could feel more confident and increase their own evaluation when purchasing more than others or spending money on expensive items.
However, shopping with the purpose of killing time should not be encouraged and continued in a long term. The young, who are considered by many that still have a lot of time and oppoturnities to enhance themselves, should make use of their spare time to do other meaningful things. They could improve their skills to chase their dreams or hobbies such as being an artist, a writor, a designer namely or to stand the chance to get a better job in the future by gaining more knowledge or acquiring essential skills. Rather than spending time on shopping, they should also strengthen the relationships in their family and with their friends.
Many think that the youngsters’ frequent activity in their free time is purchasing goods. That could help young people feel comfortable and self-confident, but besides spending time wandering in stores or on online websites, the young should consider using that time in other meaningful kinds of work.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, however, so, still, then, in addition, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1799.0 1615.20841683 111% => OK
No of words: 340.0 315.596192385 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.29117647059 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29407602571 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82621655221 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 176.041082164 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.570588235294 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 539.1 506.74238477 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 67.7339106583 49.4020404114 137% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.5 106.682146367 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.2857142857 20.7667163134 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.64285714286 7.06120827912 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.189655637297 0.244688304435 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0704237573749 0.084324248473 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.041391132721 0.0667982634062 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.123055785975 0.151304729494 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0255541502207 0.056905535591 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 13.0946893788 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.7 12.4159519038 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.19 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 78.4519038076 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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