Shopping is the favorite pastime for most of the young people.
Why do you think is that?
Do you think they should be encouraged to do some other useful activities?
It is undeniable that young individuals are partial to doing shopping in their spare time. This can be attributed to a host of reasons and I am of the opinion that they can engage in some other leisure pursuits besides shopping.
To begin with, there are some rationales behine their passion for shopping. One of the foremost justifications why people especially the young are enthusiastic about this activity is that it will boost their self-confidence as well as self-image. For example, when shopping for outfits, they can opt for their favorite shirts or shoes which vary in brands, sizes, and colors in order to suit them. This will not only highlight their original beauty, but also conceal their physical weaknesses, and hence becoming more confident in their daily life. Additionally, shopping is like a way to catch the latest trends as teenagers are greatly influenced by peer pressure; therefore, having a habit of doing shopping will help them get deeper insights into all aspects of the world so as to be more trendy and not left behind.
The benefits of this pastime; however, pale in comparison with the fact that people tend to squander large sums solely on shopping in order not to lose trends. This will lead to the creation of the 'thrown-away' society. Thus, I would recommend that rather than spend more time and money visiting some local boutiques, individuals should participate in some sport centers or allot their savings to go to the gym. It will build up their body as well as improve well-being. Similarly, volunteering would be no doubt a ideal choice for teenagers This is because in addition to helping other people, their good behaviour will be noted down in their CV so that they could be given precedence to gain job promotions.
In conclusion, these are some compelling reasons why the young are passionate about shopping and it seems to me that physical activities and volunteering are two of the most worthwhile pastimes that will undoubted better their life quality.
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Comments
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 777, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
... insights into all aspects of the world so as to be more trendy and not left behind. ...
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Line 5, column 513, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...milarly, volunteering would be no doubt a ideal choice for teenagers This is beca...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, hence, however, if, similarly, so, therefore, thus, well, while, as to, for example, in addition, in conclusion, no doubt, as well as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 24.0651302605 162% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1675.0 1615.20841683 104% => OK
No of words: 337.0 315.596192385 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9703264095 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28457229495 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71634452733 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 176.041082164 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.584569732938 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 511.2 506.74238477 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 67.2902394955 49.4020404114 136% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.846153846 106.682146367 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.9230769231 20.7667163134 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.9230769231 7.06120827912 183% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.21082871945 0.244688304435 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0737491545986 0.084324248473 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0524374157327 0.0667982634062 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.142653705116 0.151304729494 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0313756675853 0.056905535591 55% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 13.0946893788 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 50.2224549098 109% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 12.4159519038 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.53 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 78.4519038076 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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