Society is becoming obsessed with material goods like fast cars, designer clothes and flashy jewellery. We have stopped caring about important things and that is why divorce rate are so high and family bonds are not as strong anymore, our value system is disintegrating. To what extent do you agree or disagree.
Society is moving away from fundamental concepts towards materialism. Consequently, divorce rates have risen significantly and family ties have weakened, all of which indicate the disintegration of our value system. From my perspective, this viewpoint is partially true.
Firstly, materialistic lifestyle have contributed to the degradation of the quality of life of members of modern society. This is because individuals these days believe that success is associated to wealth. Although this viewpoint is not new, it is bolstered by the mass media in today’s society. Therefore, many individuals are under the misconception that rich people are sucessful. Consequently, the most common way of demonstrating one’s wealth is to possess as much high-quality and luxurious goods as possible. These citizens are then trapped in an endless cycle of work to buy then to work and buy again as the marketplace is always manufacturing new products and fashion trends are always changing. As a result, such individuals suffer stress from overworking, depression from lack of true friends and envy to richer individuals. Therefore, consumerism degrades people’s life quality and their family members also as they have less time together and thus less understanding.
However, materialism is necessary as it employs people and provide basic necessities and amenities to individuals. For example, people need to have enough food, adequate clothes, housing and so on. Therefore, individuals need to work to have the money to buy the goods they need while products need to be sold to create employment for people. These two concepts of working and buying is inextricably linked together. For instance, if citizens stopped purchasing things, there would be no need for workers and thus no money for people to buy things. Consequently, the global economy would be in a turmoil.
To conclude, materialism is a fundamental part of our society to provide job and meet people’s basic needs. However, it is misused as a tool to measure one’s social status, which shift one’s focus from the things that matter the most to them and degrade their life quality.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, firstly, however, if, so, then, therefore, thus, while, for example, for instance, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1815.0 1615.20841683 112% => OK
No of words: 338.0 315.596192385 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.36982248521 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28774723029 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.06560418092 2.80592935109 109% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 176.041082164 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.55325443787 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 558.9 506.74238477 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.3715343403 49.4020404114 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.5263157895 106.682146367 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.7894736842 20.7667163134 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.63157894737 7.06120827912 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.106983429367 0.244688304435 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0309249628156 0.084324248473 37% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.045840761098 0.0667982634062 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0751364009933 0.151304729494 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0459330853402 0.056905535591 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 13.0946893788 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 50.2224549098 91% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.57 12.4159519038 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.78 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 78.4519038076 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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