Some countries allow old people to work to any age that they want. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?
The aging population has draw a majority of attention these days since there is a heated debate about whether it is beneficial for society or not when some nations give them the permission to be in the workforce as long as their desire. From my personal standpoint, I would content that the benefits of this policy would overshadow its negative aspects.
On the one hand, the enormous contribution that the elderly can bring to society is somewhat undeniable. First of all, it is their life-long working experience that make them indispensable to the job market. Senior employees would be those taking the responsibility to pass down their knowledge and skills to the younger generation so as to improving effectiveness and productivity at work. The second point that should be taken into consideration is the explosion of individualism in this day and age, the old people do not want to be financial dependence and be a burden to their offsprings. Hence, by having an occupation, they would be able to not only pay their own living cost but also keep their self-esteem from being devastated. It is not to mentioned that by extending the mandatory retirement age, the government budget would be alleviate as a result of less spending on pension and medical insurance, this amount of money can be allocated to other fields, such as improving the country’s economy or renovating decrepit infrastructure.
On the other hand, there are some downsides of this policy that we should not be ignorant. There is a growing concern related to the deficiency of jobs in the employment market nowadays due to the truth that the higher the retirement age, the less available vacancies would be for the youth. Considering some developing countries possessing extremely young population like Vietnam, Malaysia or the Philippines, it may pose a threat to their economy considering the fact that youngsters, who are quickly-adapt to cutting-edge technology and latest information, only made up a small amount in the workforce.
In a nutshell, even though there are some minor drawbacks, I still adhere that this tendency would have a positive effect on the country in the long run.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, may, second, so, still, as to, such as, as a result, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 13.1623246493 160% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 24.0651302605 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.3376753507 180% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1817.0 1615.20841683 112% => OK
No of words: 358.0 315.596192385 113% => OK
Chars per words: 5.07541899441 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34981470047 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.0252067238 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 176.041082164 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.575418994413 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 573.3 506.74238477 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.2975951904 143% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 73.4621501183 49.4020404114 149% => OK
Chars per sentence: 151.416666667 106.682146367 142% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.8333333333 20.7667163134 144% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.41666666667 7.06120827912 133% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.130488390774 0.244688304435 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0452468750469 0.084324248473 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0359285923735 0.0667982634062 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0739818162476 0.151304729494 49% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0244454429324 0.056905535591 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.4 13.0946893788 133% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.04 50.2224549098 84% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 11.3001002004 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.78 12.4159519038 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.49 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 78.4519038076 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.1190380762 134% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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