In some countries the average weight of people is increasing and their levels of health and fitness are decreasing.What do you think are the causes of these problems and what measures could be taken to solve them?

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In some countries the average weight of people is increasing and their levels of health and fitness are decreasing.
What do you think are the causes of these problems and what measures could be taken to solve them?

One of the most debatable issue today relates to majority of the people's weight tend to be increasing, and physical fitness are decreasing. Presenting my views I would intend to explore the aforementioned views in the upcoming paragraphs.
There are probably a number of factors involved Why people's body make fatty. The chief cause might be that in today's era majority of the people's like to eat the fast food,as well as fast food is cooked by several fatty oils and spices. For instance, doctor's suggest that more use of fast food is adversely affect on the human heart . As well as subsequent reason could be that, in the past people did the hard work but now a time people do the computer work it is fully brain work not physically activity, schedule of people tend to be very busy. So they have no time for exercise. As a result people's weight tend to be increasing.
However, a definite actions that could be taken to mitigate of most of the people prefer to travel by the own car and motorcycle ,but I suggest people's who work near to their home they ride on bicycle to go for work. As well as a second bonus might be that people drink more than more water in a day it reduce the fat level in the human body. Home made food eaten by the people's.strict rules should be make by government to give the one hour for exercise and rules must be make the people's to
To conclusions, although there are good reasons but my point of views is "health is initially and after that all work". Otherwise human life tend to be decreas.

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Average: 6.1 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, second, so, well, for instance, as a result, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 15.0 24.0651302605 62% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1271.0 1615.20841683 79% => OK
No of words: 281.0 315.596192385 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.5231316726 5.12529762239 88% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09427095027 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50077448896 2.80592935109 89% => OK
Unique words: 155.0 176.041082164 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.551601423488 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 405.9 506.74238477 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 5.43587174349 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 74.5066645043 49.4020404114 151% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.916666667 106.682146367 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.4166666667 20.7667163134 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.08333333333 7.06120827912 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 5.01903807615 259% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.179288644952 0.244688304435 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0663490030866 0.084324248473 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0516495748535 0.0667982634062 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.103048538995 0.151304729494 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0365884004361 0.056905535591 64% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 13.0946893788 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.05 50.2224549098 130% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.23 12.4159519038 74% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.04 8.58950901804 94% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 78.4519038076 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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