In some countries, children are often told that they can achieve
anything if they try hard enough
What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message?
It is a common belief for children in some countries that once they strive, they can have anything they want. This essay will outline some advantages of this belief accompanied by its possible drawbacks if children do not "try hard" in the right way.
To start with, this statement brings children some considerable benefits. First, children will have more motivation and belief to achieve their goals. This belief acts as an incentive for them to try their best and work incessantly to fulfill their dreams. They always keep in their minds that success is right ahead, so if they try hard, they can shorten their ways to reach their targets. Second, children can become more determined and strong-minded, because they believe in what they are told, and never give up easily until having what they desire. For example, if one person is asked to run 1 kilometer without stopping to receive 100 dollars, he will do it at all costs to meet the requirement. Similarly, children are taught that if they work with enough effort (1 kilometer), they will possess whatever they want (100 dollars). Therefore, this statement is a significant encouragement to help children in their journey of becoming successful.
Nevertheless, there are some noteworthy downsides besides its considerable merits. Trying hard is not enough and children need other not less important factors to satisfy their desires. First, children will have more difficulties surmounting failures. It is engraved in their mind that trying hard and hard, and you will have what you want. Therefore, when something does not happen as they expect, the young will be very disappointed and this will be a challenge for them to accept their defeats as well as recover energy to start all over again. Furthermore, children may become more stubborn and lose their flexibility. The statement inculcates in their life and youngsters turn their minds to arduous work and are immersed in it without noticing that their methods are not appropriate and systematic. They focus exclusively on trying hard but not having an objective and inclusive view to change their schemes and solve problems when being failed more methodically and smartly. Therefore, they can dismiss opportunities and finally being weary because of the lack of flexibility.
In conclusion, besides being told to try hard, children should be taught how to optimize their ability to maximize the strengths of arduous work and lower the hindrance of the aforementioned belief.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, finally, first, furthermore, if, may, nevertheless, second, similarly, so, therefore, well, for example, in conclusion, as well as, to start with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 7.85571142285 191% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 10.4138276553 173% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 24.0651302605 220% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2101.0 1615.20841683 130% => OK
No of words: 405.0 315.596192385 128% => OK
Chars per words: 5.18765432099 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48604634366 4.20363070211 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76419284402 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 176.041082164 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.516049382716 0.561755894193 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 624.6 506.74238477 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 5.43587174349 239% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 16.0721442886 124% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.7555844306 49.4020404114 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.05 106.682146367 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.25 20.7667163134 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.95 7.06120827912 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 8.67935871743 173% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.397264356082 0.244688304435 162% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.132438782613 0.084324248473 157% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0974647130653 0.0667982634062 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.273083043852 0.151304729494 180% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.120512086107 0.056905535591 212% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 13.0946893788 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 50.2224549098 119% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.82 12.4159519038 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.06 8.58950901804 94% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 78.4519038076 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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