In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message?
Some cultural beliefs, kids have to put forth a wealth of effort to acquire their goals. In my standpoint, some significant merits can be elicited from this notion along with the demerits which I will elucidate in the subsequenting paragraph.
With regard to some beneficial aspects, making a strong effort to obtain desired results tends to develop the children’s sense of tenacity. They would be more willing to attempt new experiences, yielding positive outcomes. As seen in Japanese educational culture, which teaches the importance of hard work at an early age is taught to value perseverance through strict school routines and consistent homework. Moreover, the ability of how kids appreciate failure and result success reminds them to keep going and view failure as a chance to develop and to learn. For instance, Michael Jordan who is lost almost 300 games in his basketball games remarkably becomes the greatest basketball player of all time.
Turning to drawbacks, perfectionist demands from parents towards their young kids who encourage them to perform endless perfection from themselves, leading to personality disorders. As a consequence, if parents’ expectations were unfulfilled, kids would blame themselves and feel demotivated. In addition, they tend to ignore their nutritional value required for daily dietary intake. Children often skip their mealtime as well as consuming fast food due to the numerous tasks they must do as parts of their educational purposes. Along with drained energy, many young teenagers experience digestive disorders vulnerable to common diseases.
To sum up, putting up the remarkable efforts to attain the goals arise from the upsides ranging from developing a sense of persistence to accompanying failure and success. Meanwhile, the downsides that we could see are the mind-burdening family demands and well-being future.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 195, Rule ID: EN_GB_SIMPLE_REPLACE
Message: I is a common American expression, in British English it is more common to use: I
Suggestion: I
...is notion along with the demerits which I will elucidate in the subsequenting par...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, moreover, so, well, while, for instance, in addition, as well as, to sum up, with regard to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1595.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 288.0 315.596192385 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.53819444444 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11953428781 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97442602293 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 176.041082164 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.6875 0.561755894193 122% => OK
syllable_count: 485.1 506.74238477 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.7313062363 49.4020404114 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.928571429 106.682146367 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5714285714 20.7667163134 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.78571428571 7.06120827912 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.117886987014 0.244688304435 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0361980227975 0.084324248473 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0417909694491 0.0667982634062 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0633898980314 0.151304729494 42% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0378580884319 0.056905535591 67% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 13.0946893788 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 50.2224549098 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.85 12.4159519038 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.39 8.58950901804 121% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 78.4519038076 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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