In some countries, parents expect children to spend long time studying in and after school and have less free time. Do you think it has positive or negative effects on children and society that they live in?
In the increasingly competitive society, children are expected to spend more time on educational purpose either at school or at home. Although it may offer some benefits, but I believe that its adverse impacts on individuals and society relatively high than its positive affects.
On the one hand,having children to pay nearly full of their attention on studying is definitely beneficial in certain cases. Firstly,They can receive a range of subjects,that will help one be well-prepared for to work in different fields in the future.As the saying goes, knowledge is not a burden。all-round development can secure them a decent job with promising future,avoid the possible risk of unemployment.secondly,allowing children to have less free time for such things as watching television or playing computer games is what is right for the young teenagers as well as society.
On the other hand, I would argue that these benefits are outweighted by the negative effects. Forcing students to take intensive courses or continuous assessments may put them under extreme pressure,as a result, more and more students have mental health problems. Furthermore, lack of free time may lead to immature cognitive development, and students’thoughts and behaviours may become extreme,it may increase the rate of violate law,that will be harmful to individuals and society.
In conclusion, as the reasons indicated above, it is obvious to acknowledge the positive implications of this problem and the negative benefits of deprivation of children’s free time also be regarded as at least as severe.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, may, second, secondly, so, well, at least, in conclusion, as a result, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1361.0 1615.20841683 84% => OK
No of words: 260.0 315.596192385 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.23461538462 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.01553427287 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.08555280212 2.80592935109 110% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 176.041082164 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.626923076923 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 427.5 506.74238477 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 16.0721442886 50% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 32.0 20.2975951904 158% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 92.7340788222 49.4020404114 188% => OK
Chars per sentence: 170.125 106.682146367 159% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.5 20.7667163134 157% => OK
Discourse Markers: 18.0 7.06120827912 255% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.293978541767 0.244688304435 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.127389666657 0.084324248473 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0878661058451 0.0667982634062 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.17803936557 0.151304729494 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.105607245037 0.056905535591 186% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.5 13.0946893788 149% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.0 50.2224549098 78% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 11.3001002004 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.65 12.4159519038 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.84 8.58950901804 115% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 78.4519038076 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.8 10.1190380762 146% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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