In some countries, secondary schools aim to provide a general education across a range of subjects. In others, children focus on a narrow range of subjects related to a particular career. Which of these two systems is more appropriate in today's world?
In some nations, schools which for 11 - 15 year students intend to train them in general learning whilst there has been growing tendency to concentrate on some of academic subjects related to their occupation. In my opinion, although people agree with the former, I think that the latter is more suitable for system's today world by some reasons below
To begin with, studying too many subjects might cause adolescents waste their time without having any benefits. For instance, some subjects such as History, Geography, Literature etc take a long time to learn by heart but those subjects don't help them in their profession in the future. Their dream is becoming a doctor or an engineer, it's no earthly use because if they want to be a doctor or an engineer, they have to be full of understanding about diseases and electricity
On the one hand, there are more time for them to give their undivided attention to particular subjects. Hence it follows that students will be master of some subjects and it will create many experts for society in the future. Furthermore, when children grow up, every child is gifted in a field and have their own dream. We can not force them to learn subjects which they are not interested in or good at because it's very ineffective and additionally, this inhibit their talent. The effect of this on society are that the world will gradually lose potential youth
To sum up, for the reasons I have mentioned before, I believe that schools should allow teenagers to learn and develop by their competence
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, hence, if, so, for instance, i think, in general, such as, in my opinion, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1277.0 1615.20841683 79% => OK
No of words: 264.0 315.596192385 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.83712121212 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03089032464 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56567700017 2.80592935109 91% => OK
Unique words: 160.0 176.041082164 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.606060606061 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 395.1 506.74238477 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 16.0721442886 50% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 33.0 20.2975951904 163% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 63.45655502 49.4020404114 128% => OK
Chars per sentence: 159.625 106.682146367 150% => OK
Words per sentence: 33.0 20.7667163134 159% => OK
Discourse Markers: 14.5 7.06120827912 205% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.12357748186 0.244688304435 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0570063033325 0.084324248473 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.036596230206 0.0667982634062 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0780813569519 0.151304729494 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.055015828518 0.056905535591 97% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.9 13.0946893788 137% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.44 50.2224549098 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 11.3001002004 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.38 12.4159519038 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.26 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 50.0 78.4519038076 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 9.78957915832 184% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.2 10.1190380762 150% => OK
text_standard: 18.0 10.7795591182 167% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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