In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing
high school and starting university studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young
people who decide to do this.
In various nations around the world, many people advocate taking a gap year in order to work
or travel before beginning one’s tertiary education. While this offers a few advantages, there
are also some disadvantages which are worth considering.
There are two main benefits to students travelling or working before their university
education. Firstly, through travelling, they will be able to expand their horizons. When
students go overseas, they will be exposed to different cultures and customs. As a result, they
will gain a deeper understanding of the world. In addition, students who work will learn to
appreciate the value of money. This is because they will realize the hard work involved in
earning money. Consequently, they would think more before purchasing anything they desire
and may become less impulsive in their spending.
On the other hand, various drawbacks may be noted. In the first place, travelling could cause
people to feel homesick. Many students have not been apart from their family and friends
before so when they travel, they may miss these people. In extreme circumstances, students
may even become depressed. Additionally, students who work may not want to return to their
studies. The reason for this is that they may enjoy earning money and becoming financially
independent. Therefore, their whole future could be negatively affected as these days it is
very important for everyone to graduate with a degree in order to be competitive in the job
market.
In conclusion, if students take a gap year, they could gain invaluable experience and learn to
become more independent in relation to money. However, they may also become homesick
and end up not continuing their studies. Therefore, it is necessary to weigh the benefits
against the drawbacks carefully before coming to a decision as to whether students should go
on such an adventure.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
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Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 7.85571142285 216% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1614.0 1615.20841683 100% => OK
No of words: 303.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.32673267327 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17215713816 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79262140808 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.564356435644 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 490.5 506.74238477 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 10.0 4.76152304609 210% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.2975951904 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.7270383541 49.4020404114 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.9473684211 106.682146367 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.9473684211 20.7667163134 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.10526315789 7.06120827912 129% => OK
Paragraphs: 22.0 4.38176352705 502% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 21.0 5.01903807615 418% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.111023402277 0.244688304435 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0402875063858 0.084324248473 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0418090052731 0.0667982634062 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0360456163931 0.151304729494 24% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.036582456741 0.056905535591 64% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 13.0946893788 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 50.2224549098 112% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.34 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.03 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 78.4519038076 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.1190380762 79% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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