In some countries young people have little leisure time and are under a lot of pressure to work hard in their studies.What do you think are the cause of this?What solutions can you suggest?
<p class="MsoNormal">It is commonly believed that in some parts of the world, children,
nowadays, have spent lots of their time studying hard, which lead to stressful,
than doing outdoor activities. In my opinion, parents and the government ought
to understand young people individual ability than having a high-grade, and
improve educational system for the long run development.<span style="font-size: 1.1em;">
On the one hands, most of the people have believed that </span><span style="font-size: 1.1em;">students who have higher score in their subject, such as, mathematics, science </span><span style="font-size: 1.1em;">and physics, represent as an intelligence person than who have lower grade. As </span><span style="font-size: 1.1em;">the top schools and universities only accept and justice the abilities of </span><span style="font-size: 1.1em;">pupils with merely a high score </span>in order to<span style="font-size: 1.1em;"> get a high level of education. Parents </span><span style="font-size: 1.1em;">need their children to have chance to pursue a high degree at well-known institutions. </span><span style="font-size: 1.1em;">As the result, young people must spend their time after school learning extra </span><span style="font-size: 1.1em;">tutoring outside the school with hard work of many assignments. For example, </span><span style="font-size: 1.1em;">some children can play football with neighbor after school while some were </span><span style="font-size: 1.1em;">forced to read and prepare their lessons for next day at school. </span></p><p class="MsoNormal"><o:p></o:p></p>
<p class="MsoNormal"><span style="font-size: 1.1em;">However, there are a number of solutions which should be </span><span style="font-size: 1.1em;">implemented is to revolution the educational system. To </span>evaluate<span style="font-size: 1.1em;"> the </span><span style="font-size: 1.1em;">competencies of pupils, the authorities should allow and encourage students to </span><span style="font-size: 1.1em;">present their individual skills. For example, students who have good at sport </span><span style="font-size: 1.1em;">or have ability to do some hands work, such as, technical skills to fix car or </span><span style="font-size: 1.1em;">computer. if this indicators </span>were implemented<span style="font-size: 1.1em;">, most of the students would have </span>opportunities <span style="font-size: 1.1em;">to relax and spend their time doing something focusing on their skill </span>which is <span style="font-size: 1.1em;">lead to better physical and mental health which is the best solution for the </span><span style="font-size: 1.1em;">long-term.</span></p><p class="MsoNormal"><span style="font-size: 1.1em;">
In conclusion, young people will have more time spending</span></p><p class="MsoNormal">their interested activities than focusing on doing hard work in their studies.
if the authorities and parents understand and change the educational system,
country will gain the benefit from to be talented students in the future.</p>
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'whom'?
Suggestion: whom
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: If
...'font-size: 1.1em;'>computer. if this indicators were implemented...
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Line 8, column 743, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: If
...g on doing hard work in their studies. if the authorities and parents understand ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, so, well, while, for example, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 15.0 24.0651302605 62% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2974.0 1615.20841683 184% => OK
No of words: 380.0 315.596192385 120% => OK
Chars per words: 7.82631578947 5.12529762239 153% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41515443553 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 6.65474441798 2.80592935109 237% => Word_Length_SD is high.
Unique words: 203.0 176.041082164 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.534210526316 0.561755894193 95% => OK
syllable_count: 774.9 506.74238477 153% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 2.0 1.60771543086 124% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 5.43587174349 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 34.0 20.2975951904 168% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 161.465448035 49.4020404114 327% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 270.363636364 106.682146367 253% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 34.5454545455 20.7667163134 166% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.27272727273 7.06120827912 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 10.0 4.38176352705 228% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0620906191651 0.244688304435 25% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0487807144173 0.084324248473 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0389503280161 0.0667982634062 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0653818019448 0.151304729494 43% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0697132282471 0.056905535591 123% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 32.7 13.0946893788 250% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 3.13 50.2224549098 6% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 17.1 7.44779559118 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 21.3 11.3001002004 188% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 28.73 12.4159519038 231% => Coleman_liau_index is high.
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.1 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 78.4519038076 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 32.5 9.78957915832 332% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 15.6 10.1190380762 154% => OK
text_standard: 33.0 10.7795591182 306% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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