In some countries young people have little leisure tine and under a lot of pressure to work hard in their studies . What do you think are the cause of this? What solutions can you suggest?

Essay topics:

In some countries young people have little leisure tine and under a lot of pressure to work hard in their studies . What do you think are the cause of this? What solutions can you suggest?

Nowadays, education is the powerful weapon which use to change the world. So therefore, some young people find themselves in the little leisure time due to the parental pressure and increasing competition in the university places.

Every parents wants to see their children do well in the school or colleges for the successful career so with this mindset they can put a pressure on their children to work hard in their education sector, so this means they exert highly pressure on them to spend hours each day studying at home. Not only this, some even arrange the tuition classes after the studying in whole day in school and again they take three hours extra on study. As a result their spare time extremely limited.

In addition to this, increasing more and more competition is also the major reason behind this menace, as these days most of the higher universities giving the opportunity only to the those students who get higher grades in every subjects so they depressed and bother by this obligatory rules in the universities so they started to study long hours each days to take admission in these universities.

Towards the solution, the parents should take care of their children by providing them a free atmosphere and little leisure time as well after their school. Furthermore, school should understand the parents that too much pressure can lead the anxiety, stress and pressure on the children, so the parents should find some ways to eradicate this pressure on them. Another effective measure would be for the government to invest in the building of more universities places. This could be done by expanding existing universities or by constructing new ones. This would have the effect of easing competitions for places giving teenagers some of their precious free time back.

On overall analysis, it can true to say that parents should understand the perils of their children and try to curb it. So the mutual efforts of the parents and teachers should solve the problem of the anxiety in the children.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, so, therefore, well, in addition, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 13.1623246493 30% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 33.0 24.0651302605 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1694.0 1615.20841683 105% => OK
No of words: 340.0 315.596192385 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.98235294118 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29407602571 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58292235448 2.80592935109 92% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.514705882353 0.561755894193 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 517.5 506.74238477 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 93.520557497 49.4020404114 189% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.307692308 106.682146367 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.1538461538 20.7667163134 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.92307692308 7.06120827912 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.01903807615 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.185119714808 0.244688304435 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0665013464174 0.084324248473 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.054379195775 0.0667982634062 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.103305981169 0.151304729494 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0531788372773 0.056905535591 93% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 50.2224549098 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.9 12.4159519038 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.22 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 78.4519038076 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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