In many different nations, a minor group of employees and civil servants are paid enormous salaries according to their working efforts. Some people totally embrace this situation, but others also argue that the governments should limit the salaries to a particular extent to restrict wealth and poor distribution. In my opinion, I agree with the first view, however, the government need to implement some policy about social equality.
To begin with, people who entirely support that a small workforce can earn a remarkable sum of money for their dedication to their work. For example, the police force who are under a mass of threats to guarantee safety for a cities' residents should be paid higher than a normal worker in a factory. To be more specific, in Vietnam, the police force sometimes needs to cooperate with the army to eradicate a range of hazardous criminal gang alongside the country's foundation. Another essential proof for this viewpoint is that higher salary would thrust the workforce devotion towards their work, therefore enhancing the working achievement.
On the other hand, the opponents believe that a higher salary level means a larger distance between peasants and the elite. Accordingly, the rich will earn more money and become more wealthy meanwhile the poor still get stuck in the lower living conditions. As a result, a major population of the world will inhabit some polluted regions with inferior education levels and maybe with dangerous diseases that all raise the mortality rate, starvation, and illegal migrations.
Finally, after discussing these reasons, I suppose that people should receive the appropriate wages that are suitable for their performance. Nevertheless, the government also need to apply some policy that incentives the rich to donate for the poorer, to support their difficulty and to elevate the social living quality.
In conclusion, I totally agree that it is good for some countries and good for some workforce with higher salary extent, besides, the government in these areas should encourage the wealthier society to help the inferior.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 4, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
In many different nations, a minor group of employees and...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, besides, but, finally, first, however, if, may, nevertheless, so, still, therefore, while, for example, i suppose, in conclusion, as a result, in my opinion, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.3376753507 168% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1767.0 1615.20841683 109% => OK
No of words: 334.0 315.596192385 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.29041916168 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27500489853 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69690687271 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 176.041082164 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.577844311377 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 556.2 506.74238477 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 9.0 2.52805611222 356% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 31.4569302625 49.4020404114 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.923076923 106.682146367 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.6923076923 20.7667163134 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 16.0769230769 7.06120827912 228% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.370387804267 0.244688304435 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.117840085743 0.084324248473 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0781843301815 0.0667982634062 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.203249748469 0.151304729494 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0779980647894 0.056905535591 137% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.3 13.0946893788 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 50.2224549098 75% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.7 12.4159519038 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.7 8.58950901804 113% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 78.4519038076 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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