In some cultures, children are told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough.
What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message?
In few countries, it is a common practice to educate children that any goal can be
achieved through toil and labor. Although, there are definitely facts undermining this issue,
I still think it is a useful practice for yielding resilient generations.
Most common argument against this act is that hard work usually do not constitute
the whole picture. Instead, income of the parents, race and sex of the individual, societal
and political conditions they live in and many other factors can be evident contributors to
one’s success. For example, although popular wealthy people such as Elon Musk, Jeff
Bezos and Bill Gates are hailed as self-made billionaires, all of them had robust financial
backing from either their parents, or inherited assets, making risky business decisions
much less perilous.
On the other hand, it is important to consider the motivational factor this
encouragement has for the younger generation. In the rapidly advancing and competitive
economy and job market one has to improve their skills and faculties incessantly, which is
exactly what the saying advises. Personally, in my younger years belief of meritocracy
instilled in me by my parents and educators was a major reason propelling me forward.
And although now I am much more familiar with the less positive realities of life, still
relatively high chance of being rewarded for my hard work is a motivating factor in my
education.
Overall, despite many criticisms against it, I believe instilling children with the belief
that they can accomplish any task is overall a positive endorsement and will be beneficial
through their lives.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, so, still, as for, as to, for example, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 41.998997996 62% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1406.0 1615.20841683 87% => OK
No of words: 260.0 315.596192385 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.40769230769 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.01553427287 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87305375338 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.665384615385 0.561755894193 118% => OK
syllable_count: 432.9 506.74238477 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 48.3987603147 49.4020404114 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 140.6 106.682146367 132% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.0 20.7667163134 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.4 7.06120827912 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 18.0 4.38176352705 411% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.131363950861 0.244688304435 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0497104791616 0.084324248473 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0437594173139 0.0667982634062 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.035399434218 0.151304729494 23% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0412313026567 0.056905535591 72% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.1 13.0946893788 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.63 50.2224549098 73% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 11.3001002004 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.39 12.4159519038 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.91 8.58950901804 115% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 78.4519038076 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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