Nowadays, many education experts claim that non-test, art-related subjects such as art, music, and handicraft should be put into practice in the secondary school system as they think that these activities could enhance students' academic scores. In my view, I am partially convinced by the statement for some reasons.
First of all, making art-relating subjects obligatory would create a massive burden for students since the official compulsory subject like math, chemistry, physics, or English are already harsh to follow. In reality, the majority of universities in Vietnam are educating colleges pursuing science professions involving physician, engineer, biologist, or accountant. However, the number for art school seems to count on the finger of one's hand, and students do not particularly know them. For instance, 100000 science professors are trained a year, whereas the data for the artist, musician seems to be over a thousand annually. For that reason, students would prefer logical fields to artistic majors.
On the other hand, switching mandatory subjects to the obligatory matter would encourage gifted students like cleverness or drawing. When it comes to the Vietnam teaching method, we usually think of the plain dreary theory classes. Students have to spend many hours in those classes rather than having a practical lesson. Hence, changing the prioritize of compulsory subjects will create a new playground for students and improve academic scores for those who love the arts. For instance, many experts divide intelligence into nine categories, but education in Vietnam only focuses on two types: logical intelligence and verbal intelligence. Perhaps, if the education system could widen the essential subject spectrum and reduce the volume of knowledge, then it would be helpful for art lovers.
In conclusion, I admit that science classes exert a direct influence on the development of a nation. However, artistic also plays an equally important role in the education system as it could help students to be creative and improving their scores,
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, however, if, second, so, then, whereas, for instance, in conclusion, such as, first of all, in my view, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.3376753507 192% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1753.0 1615.20841683 109% => OK
No of words: 319.0 315.596192385 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.49529780564 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22617688928 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77441687208 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 176.041082164 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.617554858934 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 537.3 506.74238477 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 0.809619238477 618% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.1314065108 49.4020404114 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.866666667 106.682146367 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2666666667 20.7667163134 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.73333333333 7.06120827912 138% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.172939255272 0.244688304435 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0523777561707 0.084324248473 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0837783943586 0.0667982634062 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.124599495016 0.151304729494 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.110421392325 0.056905535591 194% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 50.2224549098 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.62 12.4159519038 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.78 8.58950901804 114% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 78.4519038076 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 9.78957915832 158% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.7795591182 148% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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