In some parts of the world, traditional festivals and celebrations have disappeared or are disappearing. What do you think are the causes of this development and what measures could be taken to solve it?
In some regions of the planet, it is obvious that the vanishing of conventional events is apparent. This situation derives from numerous reasons and appropriate solutions can be taken to prevent this.
There are many reasons behind the vanishing of cultural occasions. The first reason is the development of technology, the world is being strongly industrialised so many people tend to use electronic devices to update the news consistently or entertain themselves, which may take a lot of time and prevent them from approaching something that is relevant to the previous generation. As a result, conventional occasions are fading away and being replaced by entertaining activities of electronic devices. On the other hand, it is also believed that development of society urges humans to work constantly in order to enhance their financial condition and their estate in society. In addition, the pressure of money makes people feel bored with other things, including conventional occasions which don't make money. For example, in Viet Nam the economy is advancing significantly, which leads to the rise of living prices so people have to work non-stop and pay less attention to traditional occasions. So that is also the reason why cultural events is vanishing
Efforts can be made by the government and individuals to deal with this problem efficiently. To the government, they can raise the awareness of inhabitants by organising several cultural events and offering a reasonable price for all social classes to participate in which can contribute to preserving and maintaining the value of traditional occasions. Besides, every individual can also preserve the value of cultural occasions by spending time looking for some information about traditional events. On the other hand, people who have families should educate their children about such events to ensure that cultural values can be preserved and passed through generations.
In conclusion, the disappearance of cultural occasions is still a complex issue that requires multiple measures to solve.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, if, look, may, so, still, for example, in addition, in conclusion, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 41.998997996 117% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1749.0 1615.20841683 108% => OK
No of words: 320.0 315.596192385 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.465625 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22948505376 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.04345962424 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.559375 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 553.5 506.74238477 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.8209185317 49.4020404114 131% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.538461538 106.682146367 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.6153846154 20.7667163134 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.53846153846 7.06120827912 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.118796513212 0.244688304435 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0435573648934 0.084324248473 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0325926337981 0.0667982634062 49% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0846968015564 0.151304729494 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0242603407852 0.056905535591 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.6 13.0946893788 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 50.2224549098 77% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.74 12.4159519038 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.56 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 78.4519038076 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.