some people argue that immigrants should adopt the local culture when immigrating to a new country. An alternative vieww is that they can adapt to a new environment by establishing a minority community.
Discuss both views and give your opinion.
The twenty-first century is marked by a high frequency of population movements, which has led to an opinion being divided as to whether immigrants should learn about the targeted culture or form a minority group in a new country. It is necessary for newcomers to continue following their traditions, while learning new etiquette to integrate into a new community.
Understanding local traditions can certainly facilitate the transition process, during the early stage of a migrant’s life in a new society. It is apparent that by observing local conventions and recognizing the cultural gaps, one can know what to do to avoid embarrassment or misunderstanding, potentially giving rise to unnecessary hostility, and effect a sense of comfort for themselves. For example, it is a norm in Vietnam to ask about one’s occupation, salaries and marital status in the first encounter, while such questions are considered inappropriate to ask in Western countries before establishing a rapport. Therefore, gaining an insight in local custom is vital to create a harmony between the locals and immigrants.
While learning about a new culture, nevertheless it is equally essential to be able to maintain one’s ethnic identity. This is simply because the harmonious coexistence of various ethnic groups is of benefit to both the locals and new settlers. Not only can being able to continue practicing one’s cultural traditions in a foreign environment counteract stress stemming from culture shock, but also increase their confidence in residence in such area. More significantly, the flourishing of ethnic diversity contributes to the establishment of a multi-cultural environment, a prerequisite for attracting highly skilled workforce across the world.
in conclusion, to actually live and thrive in other countries, emigrants should gain more knowledge about local customs and simultaneously, establish their own communities where they can sustain a connection with their ancestral roots.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 123, Rule ID: WHETHER[6]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
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Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: In
... skilled workforce across the world. in conclusion, to actually live and thrive...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, if, nevertheless, so, therefore, while, as to, for example, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 12.0 24.0651302605 50% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1697.0 1615.20841683 105% => OK
No of words: 302.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.61920529801 5.12529762239 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1687104957 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.34243108128 2.80592935109 119% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 176.041082164 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.62582781457 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 531.0 506.74238477 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 51.3302385386 49.4020404114 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 154.272727273 106.682146367 145% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.4545454545 20.7667163134 132% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.18181818182 7.06120827912 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.255487525658 0.244688304435 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0867673029181 0.084324248473 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0395191566845 0.0667982634062 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.142520082279 0.151304729494 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0338900289991 0.056905535591 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.8 13.0946893788 144% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 27.15 50.2224549098 54% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.2 11.3001002004 143% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.61 12.4159519038 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.88 8.58950901804 127% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 78.4519038076 144% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.7795591182 148% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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