some people believe that competitive sports, both team and individual, have no place in the school curriculum. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
It has been suggested that physical activities such as football or tennis, which have a high-competitive characteristic, could hamper the process of studying at school. Although it could be distracting and causing hatred between students, I am of the opinion that competitions would incentivise students to be better.
On the one hand, due to the competition, students might hold some grudge against each other, which would probably affect their study ability. Because of the aggressive characteristics of competitive sports, competitors tend to be in high tense during the match and this could lead to some misdemeanours. For example, in a football match there could be a lot of fouls between players with players, most of the time it would settle down calmly be the judge, unfortunately sometime thing goes wrong and a clash between two people or more people. Consequently, this kind of manner is deemed as unappropriated on campus, which explains why competitive sports is not highly considered. However, this problem could easily be solved if students are taught about sportsmanship and supervised by their teachers.
On the other hand, when having such competitive games in the school curriculum students tend to try harder to overcome not just the opponent but also themselves in comparison with non-competitive sports. This would be a great opportunity for them to improve themselves. Additionally, winning the game might give them confidence. For instance, to surpass a rival in a basketball game, they should train harder and push themselves to the limit to champion the game. Inevitably, this could boost students both mental and physical health.
In conclusion, if there are competitions in sports in the school curriculum it could have some setbacks like fighting or bad behaviours, I believe that with the right guide of teacher, attending competitive sports could give students chances to enhance manner, mental and physical health.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 185, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ve that with the right guide of teacher, attending competitive sports could give ...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, however, if, so, for example, for instance, in conclusion, kind of, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 7.85571142285 191% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1649.0 1615.20841683 102% => OK
No of words: 307.0 315.596192385 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.37133550489 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18585898806 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.09781406023 2.80592935109 110% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.589576547231 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 488.7 506.74238477 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.3076002944 49.4020404114 130% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.846153846 106.682146367 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.6153846154 20.7667163134 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.15384615385 7.06120827912 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.14937517876 0.244688304435 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0519645763879 0.084324248473 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.060114614396 0.0667982634062 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.109260421716 0.151304729494 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0599615809583 0.056905535591 105% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 13.0946893788 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.16 12.4159519038 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.79 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 78.4519038076 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 185, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ve that with the right guide of teacher, attending competitive sports could give ...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, however, if, so, for example, for instance, in conclusion, kind of, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 7.85571142285 191% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1649.0 1615.20841683 102% => OK
No of words: 307.0 315.596192385 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.37133550489 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18585898806 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.09781406023 2.80592935109 110% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.589576547231 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 488.7 506.74238477 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.3076002944 49.4020404114 130% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.846153846 106.682146367 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.6153846154 20.7667163134 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.15384615385 7.06120827912 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.14937517876 0.244688304435 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0519645763879 0.084324248473 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.060114614396 0.0667982634062 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.109260421716 0.151304729494 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0599615809583 0.056905535591 105% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 13.0946893788 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.16 12.4159519038 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.79 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 78.4519038076 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.