Some people believe that a crime is a result of social problems and poverty, while others think that crime is a result of a bad person’s nature. Discuss both views and give your opinion?
Nowadays, opinions differ as to whether committing illegal activities are the repercussions of perennial social issues and property. Although a school of thought acknowledges that social problems and impoverishment can be attributed to be the primary drivers of crime, I would advocate that it may depend on the bad innate characteristics of a person.
On the one hand, a vast array of factors has prevailed some experts on supporting for the former opinion. Firstly, when being impoverished, some individuals are prone to break the laws in order to have money to purchase necessities. To illustrate, it is recorded in a great number of metropolitan areas like Washington DC or London, where the prices of products and facilities are out of their budgets that the proportion of crime commitment like robbery or burglary has increased substantially since these people do not have income. Consequently, they can be arrested and receive punishment in accordance to the laws of these nations. Furthermore, one of the determinant issues leading to this phenomenon is unemployment. This is because some individuals are not able to have salaries if they are not recruited for any occupation. Accordingly, they are motivated to orient their lives to the careers of crimes such as theft or robbery so as to possess enough money.
On the other hand, there are a host of justifications which have convinced me to concede that a person’s negative demeanors ought to be considered to be the cause of this phenomenon. The first reason is that when holding bad attitudes towards other people, many individuals want to do unfavorable actions to them. This can be perfectly exemplified that in 2022, the former prime minister of Japan was killed by an inhabitant while he was making a speech, which was a tragic murder. As a result, the murderer was arrested and sent to the prison. Moreover, currently, due to the bad nature, many adolescents are likely to do illegal activities. For instance, it is witnessed in some junior high schools in Ho Chi Minh city that a growing number of students prefer to bully and get physical with other counterparts. Hence, education authorities need to have judicious approaches in order to raise awareness among students about the repercussions of breaking the laws.
In conclusion, apparently, it cannot be denied that social problems and impoverishment need to be responsible for the prevalence of crime commitment; nevertheless, I want to affirm that negative conducts and nature should be taken into account.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, apparently, but, consequently, first, firstly, furthermore, hence, if, may, moreover, nevertheless, so, while, as to, for instance, in conclusion, such as, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 13.1623246493 205% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 7.30460921844 192% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 63.0 41.998997996 150% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2129.0 1615.20841683 132% => OK
No of words: 412.0 315.596192385 131% => OK
Chars per words: 5.16747572816 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50530610838 4.20363070211 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.13937991329 2.80592935109 112% => OK
Unique words: 232.0 176.041082164 132% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.563106796117 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 683.1 506.74238477 135% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.4512972727 49.4020404114 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.235294118 106.682146367 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.2352941176 20.7667163134 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.7058823529 7.06120827912 166% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.9879759519 251% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.172402269731 0.244688304435 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0473876704377 0.084324248473 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0357046092126 0.0667982634062 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.105167724752 0.151304729494 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0267926976786 0.056905535591 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 50.2224549098 77% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 12.4159519038 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.62 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 125.0 78.4519038076 159% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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