Some people believe that the development of business results in a loss of cultural ties between countries. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
It is said that when business develops, it creates a negative impact on cultural ties among countries. While some people agree this trend to some extent, I myself completely believe that international business does stimulate cultural ties and might not affect existing ones.
Firstly, an increase in cross-border business transactions might not hamper cultural ties but strengthen them. In fact, the understandable truth is when international trade does increase, more products will become available in every corner of the world, which enables people to raise the awareness of these countries the products come from, leading to stimulating culture respect and interest. Therefore, it is obvious that the number of people traveling around the world to explore new cultures has increased dramatically. For example, because trade between Vietnam and Korean has been so thriving, the Vietnamese understand the Korean culture deeply and the Korean are greatly interested in the Vietnam’s.
Secondly, it is clearly that it is not easy for business to disturb cultural ties which has existed for a long time. In reality, cultural ties has been established through the development of transportation and immigration between countries. As a result, although there might have business problems arising, it cannot undo the deep cultural connections. For instance, if there are business conflicts which might happen, the cultural ties between Vietnam and Cambodia will continue existing from time to time.
With the above-mentioned reasons, I think that the development of business could not has an adverse impact on cultural ties but encourage to develop new ones.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 86, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'could' requires the base form of the verb: 'have'
Suggestion: have
...t the development of business could not has an adverse impact on cultural ties but ...
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Line 4, column 139, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'developing'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'encourage' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: developing
...e impact on cultural ties but encourage to develop new ones.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, while, for example, for instance, i think, in fact, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 41.998997996 69% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1409.0 1615.20841683 87% => OK
No of words: 254.0 315.596192385 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.54724409449 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.99216450694 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9586633819 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 143.0 176.041082164 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.562992125984 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 432.9 506.74238477 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.6686541655 49.4020404114 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.090909091 106.682146367 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0909090909 20.7667163134 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.5454545455 7.06120827912 164% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.338806041418 0.244688304435 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.136162315571 0.084324248473 161% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0734291545035 0.0667982634062 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.21529179534 0.151304729494 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0831904838036 0.056905535591 146% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.3 13.0946893788 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 50.2224549098 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.21 12.4159519038 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.25 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 78.4519038076 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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