As our world marches into the future, the improvement of living standard has given people a variety of different options to choose from. It gives rise to an attitude of having excessive choices in human lives. In my point of view, while agreeing with the opinion, I still maintain another thinking about it.
On the one hand, I am acknowledging the reasons underlying why people believe that they are being exploded by too many potential choices, which can be attributed to two main reasons. One of these is that the Internet, especially social media, is expanding at a rapid pace. There are a lot of sources where people reach their desired information. Yet, those websites could not always be reliable without any warranty for the authorities. As a result, the bulk of people could create misunderstandings about certain local events. This is compounded by globalisation which giving people more options on their basic needs, including food and clothing categories…. For example, when buying an apple, consumers would be able to choose between different exporting countries, such as Australia or the USA. Interestingly, this action in the long term generates a new kind of mental illness, so-called the “decision-making disorder” preventing citizens from enjoying their freetime.
On the other hand, this phenomenon is not the current circumstance throughout society, especially the lower-class. As modernization occured, inflation in tandem with the rise in daily groceries creates a barrier for the poor to achieve a better life. For instance, while the wealthier group of people are confused on different types of food, the poor’ only choice is the cheapest one available. Granted, social welfare has taken great efforts in order to narrow down this gap, however the effect was not really vibrant. Such scenarios, therefore, should be tackled with the generous sharing from the others.
In conclusion, these days, humans have a lot of choices to select because of the technical revolution and the earth's evolution as a global village. However, yet some people can not afford these.
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- The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010 78
- Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research business and the academic world Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely Discuss both these views and give 89
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... citizens from enjoying their freetime. On the other hand, this phenomenon is no...
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'earths'' or 'earth's'?
Suggestion: earths'; earth's
...use of the technical revolution and the earths evolution as a global village. However,...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, really, so, still, therefore, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, kind of, such as, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1771.0 1615.20841683 110% => OK
No of words: 335.0 315.596192385 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.28656716418 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27820116611 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93711624141 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 176.041082164 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.65671641791 0.561755894193 117% => OK
syllable_count: 540.9 506.74238477 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.10420841683 285% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.2131890577 49.4020404114 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.3888888889 106.682146367 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6111111111 20.7667163134 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.05555555556 7.06120827912 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.174867052133 0.244688304435 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0464792478086 0.084324248473 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0310503326727 0.0667982634062 46% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.100566891116 0.151304729494 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0083096950352 0.056905535591 15% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 13.0946893788 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.4 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.48 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 78.4519038076 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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