Technology has been infiltrating into our daily life and now it seems that we cannot imagine living without it. Recently since the accessibility to tablets and TV shows for kids are also more convenience, children these days are raised with owning a tablet and carrying it around. I strongly agree that time kids spent on electronic devices, including television and computer, should be limit and they should spend more time on more traditional alternatives like books.
Spending too much time on television can shortened kids’ attention span, while books doesn’t do so. According to recent research, multitasking decreased individual’s attention span when our focus are shift too often. The habit of multitasking came from being on phone and switching the things we do. For example, changing channels while in the middle of a video on YouTube is common, they get bored easily from the content. This instant switching of channels makes children shifts their attention to different contents too fast. Thus, decreasing their attention span.
Some could argue that playing computer games are like exercise to the brain, but it comes with kids being more aggressive. While playing games kids may copied the action seen in the game and carry it out in real life, for example, punching. Another instance could be that after they lose a match, they became furious and this feeling is displaced onto family and friends. Scolding to parents when parents prevent them from playing games is also observed in many situations.
In conclusion, my point of view stands firmed that hours on TV and computer games should be reduced due to many disadvantages that come with them. There are other things that can be done in their free time apart from being on electronic devices.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, so, thus, while, apart from, for example, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1499.0 1615.20841683 93% => OK
No of words: 290.0 315.596192385 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.16896551724 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12666770723 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66862022181 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.613793103448 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 447.3 506.74238477 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.744530421 49.4020404114 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.9333333333 106.682146367 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3333333333 20.7667163134 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 7.06120827912 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 3.4128256513 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.148300549884 0.244688304435 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.046826167054 0.084324248473 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0399444579262 0.0667982634062 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.085571221758 0.151304729494 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0197434404653 0.056905535591 35% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 13.0946893788 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 50.2224549098 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.39 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 78.4519038076 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.