Some people believe that teenagers should be required to do unpaid community work in their free time. This can beneficial for teenagers and the community as well. Do you agree or disagree?
Youngsters should improve their experience for future vocation and social life. One of the main means of achieving this goal is doing unpaid community job. In my opinion, it is necessary to be a member of these groups. this is a win-win game for both sides, teenagers and communities.
Firstly, every individual needs to learn how to communicate with society. NGOs as organization teach students to have a relationship in public with others, nature, and things around us. For example, in recent years, thousands of tons of rubbish are collected from forests by the effort of these organizations in teamwork and non-profit way. Although some of this was sold to the recycling factories, the income was used for other non-profit goals. Therefore, the first result of working with such groups is improving teamwork abilities and learn better social and environmental behavior.
Secondly, these activities help communities to continue their life without spending too much money and achieving the aims. Moreover, Non-Governmental organizations (NGO) should have a comprehensive road map to develop individuals. For instance, if an organization leaves the volunteers alone with no transparent plans, not only it wastes their time, but also, they will be sentenced to extinction. Thus, it is a two-sided sword for communities, whether they can improve or die.
In conclusion, joining these clubs is profitable for both sides. it is agreed that is necessary to be a member of these associations. The only point is that the time and money spend by teenagers should be controlled by their parents for working in such communities.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to better', 'to well'
Suggestion: to better; to well
... improving teamwork abilities and learn better social and environmental behavior. ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 7.30460921844 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1377.0 1615.20841683 85% => OK
No of words: 259.0 315.596192385 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.3166023166 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.01166760082 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.06218258438 2.80592935109 109% => OK
Unique words: 160.0 176.041082164 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.617760617761 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 416.7 506.74238477 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.2085620548 49.4020404114 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.0625 106.682146367 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.1875 20.7667163134 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.4375 7.06120827912 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 3.4128256513 234% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.252142090925 0.244688304435 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0737704238814 0.084324248473 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.065564483539 0.0667982634062 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.160563927977 0.151304729494 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0783196540012 0.056905535591 138% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 13.0946893788 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 50.2224549098 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.28 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.76 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 78.4519038076 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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