*Some people feel that boarding schools (where students or pupils live at the school during the term) are an excellent option for children, while other people disagree for a number of reasons. Consider both sides of the debate and reach a conclusion*
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Boarding schools are popular among parents and guardians. However, the idea that it is a brilliant choice for children is far from unanimous because while some intellectuals see it as being so, others did not. This essay will discuss the two sides and give a concluding view.
On the one hand, those who view residential schools as perfect for the youngsters feel it offer children the opportunity to be independent, accountable, smart and careful, attributes not commonly associated with day-school pupils. For example, a report had it that the stringent guidelines on sleep-wake schedules made children from boarding schools score higher ratings in time-management compared to their counterparts from other schooling designs. In addition, these students can coordinate their studies as part of group work in classrooms and dormitories, hopefully making their lessons less teacher-led and more about autonomous learning. It then seems lucid why some people will always want children to be boarders.
On the other hand, opponents of the foregoing schooling type feel boarding school children are often emotionally detached from their parents. Due to this, such children are usually reticent about their personal affairs because there was no bonding with the parents or guardians from the cradle. Besides, they argue that indecent characters may be picked up by these pupils as they mingle with peers and become negatively influenced. From these, one can comprehend why some people will not buy into the idea that boarding schools are exceptional options for children.
Overall, it appears to be an arduous task choosing between these two schools of thoughts. This is because while one is valid for thinking boarding schools are the best as it builds children into perfect adults and teaches good grooming, the other is also not wrong for being sceptical that children may feel neglected and abandoned by parents and may succumb to negative peer pressure while in boarding houses.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 8, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...two sides and give a concluding view. On the one hand, those who view resident...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, however, may, so, still, then, while, for example, in addition, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1890.0 1615.20841683 117% => OK
No of words: 351.0 315.596192385 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.38461538462 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32839392791 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70546086839 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 176.041082164 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.60113960114 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 552.6 506.74238477 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 71.2526315304 49.4020404114 144% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.125 106.682146367 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.9375 20.7667163134 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.3125 7.06120827912 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 8.0 4.38176352705 183% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.290867368757 0.244688304435 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0887713658258 0.084324248473 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0793462380629 0.0667982634062 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.100539840079 0.151304729494 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.101440240579 0.056905535591 178% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 13.0946893788 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.92 12.4159519038 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.31 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 78.4519038076 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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