Some people feel that certain workers like nurses, doctors and teachers are undervalued and should be paid more, when other people like film actors or company bosses are paid huge sums of money that are out of proportion to the importance of the work that they do.
In contemporary society, whether the industry of entertainment or certain jobs can receive a large amount of money from the government has become a debatable issue in many parts of the world. It is argued that film stars are appreciated to live in advantageous financial backgrounds. Nevertheless, I maintain that some main careers, such as doctors, nurses, or teachers, should be paid more than other entertaining jobs for several reasons.
On the one hand, many people believe that celebrities like singers or film stars are considered as their countries’ images because they are surrogates to have face-to-face meetings with famous people from overseas countries on TV shows. To put it in other words, the most well-known MC in Vietnam named Tran Thanh usually has the responsibility to make conversations with people from abroad on lots of programs. As a result, they are indispensable in the countries’ entertainment industry. In addition, celebrities have more free time to interact with their fans through social networking sites, and they usually boast their luxurious daily lives. Therefore, their financial backgrounds can have a powerful influence to create motivation for people to push harder to live in a good financial health.
On the other hand, I incline that nurses, doctors, and teachers are far more important than any kind of job. To begin with, doctors and nurses are vital to save people’s lives by carrying out surgeries and giving medicine. Also, teachers help to boost generations’ levels of knowledge and expertise. This can lead to the prosperous countries by the professional generations. Secondly, these certain jobs have to withstand emotional burdens because they play critical roles in promoting the developing processes of their countries. According to an Oxford survey, approximately 90% of citizens are in agreement that certain jobs should be paid huge sums for various reasons.
To sum up, while celebrities can strengthen countries’ cooperation and have motivation for people to try hard, certain jobs should be paid more because of their roles. I suggest that the government should place more importance on medical and educational training than on entertainment or tourist facilities.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, well, while, in addition, kind of, such as, as a result, in other words, to begin with, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 41.998997996 131% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1889.0 1615.20841683 117% => OK
No of words: 349.0 315.596192385 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.41260744986 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32221490584 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.07845487643 2.80592935109 110% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 176.041082164 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.570200573066 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 570.6 506.74238477 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.0383355725 49.4020404114 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.0625 106.682146367 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8125 20.7667163134 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.9375 7.06120827912 155% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 8.67935871743 173% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.251671722441 0.244688304435 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0730128313966 0.084324248473 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0594893519274 0.0667982634062 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.158045743873 0.151304729494 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0431891601263 0.056905535591 76% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.1 12.4159519038 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.07 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 78.4519038076 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 9.78957915832 158% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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