Some people feel that entertainers such as film stars, pop musicians or sports stars are paid too much money. Do you agree or disagree? Which other types of job should be highly paid?

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Some people feel that entertainers such as film stars, pop musicians or sports stars are paid too much money. Do you agree or disagree? Which other types of job should be highly paid?

Considering the pace of alterations in the world of work, some careers can be found as well-paid jobs, such as singers, movie actors, and athletes. Thus, some hold this assumption that these individuals are paid more than what is fair. In this regard, I agree wholeheartedly with this statement whereby such employees deserve the high income they earn.

By scaling up the level of depression due to the hustle and bustle of life, entertainers have a largely effective role to play in delivering happiness in the way city dwellers reside, acting as a catalyst for attaining a delighted nation. Adding further fuel to this argument is the fact that employers, notably some of whom are known as music and sports sponsors and filmmakers, have found such jobs as a beneficial source of revenue through which they can generate huge profits. By way of illustration, entertaining a concert in which a well-known signer is aiming to sing can attract many audiences, thereby becoming a pool of benefits. Consequently, to keep making profits, these employers have no alternative but to offer a considerable salary to their stars. For this reason, it is perceived that how much they make a living is sufficiently fair.

Notwithstanding the blinding role such entertainers have, some other jobs should be dispensed an enormous income, such as teachers. In effect, they plant seeds of success, advancement, literacy, and above all appropriate behavior in all strata of society, keeping the wheels of development turning. To achieve such purpose, the state should seize the opportunity to pay them sufficient salaries. In this respect, some first world countries, such as the United States and Finland, are cases in point, drawing up much budget annually for the education system. As a result, the higher the salary of teachers becomes, the faster a country moves towards a developed nation.

In conclusion, much as the amount of money entertainers make is reckoned as a fair payment owing to the fact that they help citizens escape from the heavy wave of depression, there are other careers, such as teachers, which must be paid the same as these artists. Indeed, under no circumstances can we turn a blind eye to this point of view that educational staff can put our country one step ahead of the other. It is wished the government would take concrete steps to infuse a balanced budget into the education system.

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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, if, so, thus, well, in conclusion, such as, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 41.998997996 117% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2012.0 1615.20841683 125% => OK
No of words: 399.0 315.596192385 126% => OK
Chars per words: 5.04260651629 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46933824581 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84740458861 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 238.0 176.041082164 135% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.59649122807 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 619.2 506.74238477 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 10.0 4.76152304609 210% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.3618250719 49.4020404114 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.75 106.682146367 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.9375 20.7667163134 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0625 7.06120827912 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.222231292983 0.244688304435 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0654949294178 0.084324248473 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0619871047193 0.0667982634062 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.130937099647 0.151304729494 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0243722252894 0.056905535591 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 13.0946893788 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.25 12.4159519038 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.22 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 78.4519038076 141% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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