For some people, making a lot of money is an important goal. Others think that their free time is more important than wealth. Which is more important to you? Explain, giving specific reasons for your choice.
Making money is now the main goal for many people, while others believe that spending their free time is more important. This essay will outline the benefits of each statement and state my preference.
To begin with, money plays an essential role in making ends meet, especially in large cities people have to pay for almost all the goods and services. As the matter of fact, there are a large number of children has stopped school life due to insufficient money, and subsequently, become manual workers with a low salary to help their parents cover many types of expenses revolving around food and housing. Therefore, making a massive amount of money is the main goal for those people who desire not only to get rid of the problem of poverty but also possess valuable things like a smartphone or a house.
At the same time, having the pleasure time is also considered as an important element due to the benefits it might bring about. After hours of working, it is necessary for people to relax by surfing the Internet or reading a favorite book which not only helps the worker release work-related stress but also gains a wide range of knowledge revolving around their job. As a result, they subsequently work harder and improve productivity which helps the workers lessen the pressure and improve the final result.
In conclusion, although gaining as much money as possible is important for people, but in my opinion, having spare time is more necessary since it helps to boost the spirit and learn new things instinctively. By combining two-element, people can balance the workflow and their private life.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 184, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...vices. As the matter of fact, there are a large number of children has stopped school life due to...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, therefore, while, in conclusion, as a result, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 24.0651302605 54% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 41.998997996 76% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1338.0 1615.20841683 83% => OK
No of words: 274.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.88321167883 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0685311056 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55074765553 2.80592935109 91% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 176.041082164 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.616788321168 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 422.1 506.74238477 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 58.907045419 49.4020404114 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.8 106.682146367 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.4 20.7667163134 132% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.3 7.06120827912 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.281012602125 0.244688304435 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.101132235254 0.084324248473 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0800860470311 0.0667982634062 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.166749021587 0.151304729494 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0325502553961 0.056905535591 57% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 13.0946893788 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 50.2224549098 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.32 12.4159519038 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.49 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 78.4519038076 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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