Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. Which viewpoint do you agree with? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
It is believed by some that some advertisement encourages to buy unnecessary things, while others state that advertising might help people find new products that better lives. This essay will discuss my point of view and the reasons behind it.
Firstly, I believe that a good amount of things we buy, we choose them because advertisements influence us. Everywhere we turn, there are advertising boards, tv commercials and magazines full of announces that makes us believe that we need to have those things, but most of the time it's not really the case. For example, I often see tv commercials about spectacular washing machine detergents that will renew our clothes or marvellous shampoos that will make our hair shine like never before: ultimately, those products will not make our lives better, but will definitely make our wallets lighter.
In my opinion, though, the statement that affirms that some ads make us discovers particular new products what can help our everyday life is, indeed, true. Just a couple of weeks ago I saw a commercial about a new blow dryer made specifically for curly hair - that made me very curious, as I was looking for something like that. Needless to say, I bought that new blow dryer and my life was turned upside down ever since. this argument works for a number of different objects and articles advertised every day because a good ad is the one that does not mesmerize you but makes you curious for the product.
To sum up, I consider both opinions to be true. Sometimes we do end up buying things we do not need because we were influenced, but I also believe that through commercials new life-changing products can be discovered. Advertisements are a very powerful instrument but it needs to be used with care.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 59, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'buying'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'encourage' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: buying
...some that some advertisement encourages to buy unnecessary things, while others state ...
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Line 2, column 283, Rule ID: IT_IS[6]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
...have those things, but most of the time its not really the case. For example, I oft...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: This
...life was turned upside down ever since. this argument works for a number of differen...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, look, really, so, while, for example, in my opinion, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 7.30460921844 205% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 52.0 24.0651302605 216% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 26.0 41.998997996 62% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1452.0 1615.20841683 90% => OK
No of words: 300.0 315.596192385 95% => OK
Chars per words: 4.84 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16179145029 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73250108494 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 176.041082164 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.61 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 455.4 506.74238477 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 65.5520891268 49.4020404114 133% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.0 106.682146367 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0 20.7667163134 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.75 7.06120827912 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.324123318859 0.244688304435 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.11030444802 0.084324248473 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0755418008915 0.0667982634062 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.186793882478 0.151304729494 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0337828987934 0.056905535591 59% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 13.0946893788 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 50.2224549098 109% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.09 12.4159519038 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.03 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 78.4519038076 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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