Some people say that devoting one’s time to family activities is more important than spending time working. Others believe that dedicating one’s time to work is more important. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
It is a common belief that investing time in working is bringing people a range of benefits financially. However, there is a more persuasive argument that spending time at family gatherings plays a vital role since it contributes to the well-being of the whole society.
On the one hand, it is necessary for humans to work so that their families will be financially ensured. If people do not make a living, family happiness will be affected. Money shortage is seen as a primary factor leading to a high rate of divorce because virtually all domestic disputes stem from financial problems. This somehow proves why people dedicate most of their time doing 9-to-5 jobs on a daily basis. For example, many parents miss out on children’s events not as they are not interested in them, but it is a trade-off between livelihood and family priority. Thus, to increase the family’s living standards and reduce arguments among members of a family, working is a mandatory condition.
Nevertheless, I support the idea that family activities are of great importance and need to be prioritized owing to the fact that family time makes a huge contribution to the happiness of individuals and families. Family reunion helps lessen stressful work problems, being with family is the funniest and most relaxing time of the day. Research has shown that the more time people spend with family, the more delighted and content they feel, this also augments the spirit of employees in working environments. Therefore, it is extremely convincing that family is the crucial element to enhance collective happiness.
To sum up, while it is apparent that people cannot maintain a stiff family foundation without sacrificing their time on work, it is undeniable that family activities should be taken into account due to the profound benefits that they bring to each individual and community as well.
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- Some people say that devoting one s time to family activities is more important than spending time working Others believe that dedicating one s time to work is more important Discuss both these views and give your own opinion 84
- Some people say that devoting one s time to family activities is more important than spending time working Others believe that dedicating one s time to work is more important Discuss both these views and give your own opinion 84
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, nevertheless, so, therefore, thus, well, while, for example, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 13.1623246493 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1578.0 1615.20841683 98% => OK
No of words: 309.0 315.596192385 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.1067961165 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1926597562 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81571624601 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 176.041082164 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.595469255663 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 501.3 506.74238477 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.8234390335 49.4020404114 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.384615385 106.682146367 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.7692307692 20.7667163134 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.23076923077 7.06120827912 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.311751725346 0.244688304435 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.107348137795 0.084324248473 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.065042454532 0.0667982634062 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.195368682624 0.151304729494 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0595829873566 0.056905535591 105% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.48 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 78.4519038076 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.