Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion
Recently, the phenomenon of music and its corresponding impacts have sparked a long-running dispute. In this regard, apart from multiple roles od music in societies, some people consider music as an appropriate mean to accommodate cultures and people of different ages. In my view, music is capable to make people and cultures far closer together with respect to emotions and being familiar with distinct cultures.
Obviously, music, whether it has song or not, can considerably affect on individuals’ feelings of various ages, from range of a new-born baby to an elderly person. According to researchers almost all people feel far more sympathetic via listening music, while it causes a significant rise in peaceful emotions of mankind. Consequently, through music which is originated from miscellaneous cultures, nations could put aside their conflicts.
In addition, each country has its own unique music. Their music, undoubtedly, stem from such matter as their history and nature. Meanwhile, leading musicians with distinctive nationalities hold concerts across the four corners of the globe. Hence, holding concerts and festivals paves the way to make other nations’ population familiar with their beliefs and values. By comparing these different cultures through music window, it is likely that nations become closer together.
On the other hand, we shouldn’t lose sight of the opponents. They are of the opinion that there are far better ways to bring numerous cultures together rather than merely music. For instance, they name negotiations, finding common viewpoints amongst societies, and religion. Unlike music, particularly alongside dance, which might be banned in some countries, these countries’ authorities would welcome to negotiations and religious feasts.
To sum up, despite compelling arguments on both sides, I opt to vigorously support the idea that music is the best way to bring people together and even prevent, or at least alleviate collisions between cultures. Scientist maintain that music is hardwired in humans’ nature and we couldn’t imagine a world without music.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, hence, if, so, while, apart from, at least, for instance, in addition, in my view, to sum up, with respect to, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 41.998997996 121% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1796.0 1615.20841683 111% => OK
No of words: 320.0 315.596192385 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.6125 5.12529762239 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22948505376 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92290924209 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 176.041082164 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.653125 0.561755894193 116% => OK
syllable_count: 544.5 506.74238477 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 11.0 4.76152304609 231% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.728487433 49.4020404114 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.647058824 106.682146367 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8235294118 20.7667163134 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.35294117647 7.06120827912 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 3.4128256513 234% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.279347814379 0.244688304435 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.080786621217 0.084324248473 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0775580613965 0.0667982634062 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.151873378839 0.151304729494 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0771142218338 0.056905535591 136% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 13.0946893788 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 50.2224549098 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.26 12.4159519038 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.76 8.58950901804 114% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 78.4519038076 135% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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