Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
I agree with this topic. In my opinion, I think that music can join any people who has different culture together, Music can make a relationship between people all around the world. Although it has different rhytum but when the people who listen to music, their feeling will be better. For the
example the woman who will be mom in the future she can use music to join between mom and her baby. I have known about how to make the patients feel better and some cases of the patients in the hospital, the doctors will use music for them. When they patients listen to music (solf music) it makes them feel better. And now we don't use music only human we can use it with animals and plants too.
Music can make us feel better, although we are different ages, nationalities and culture. when we like the same kind of music. We can join and listen together. One more example I have friend and he is the foreigner.He is around 25 years old. He likes to go anywhere with me and he likes to listen Thai song, especially song for life. He tries to practice to sing Thai song and he can do it. Now he can sing many Thai songs.
Including I think music has some power to make human's mind. And it can make good relationship between people who has different ages, cultures and nationalities.
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...l, the doctors will use music for them. When they patients listen to music solf musi...
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...en Thai song, especially song for life. He tries to practice to sing Thai song and...
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Suggestion: practice singing
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, so, i think, kind of, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 13.1623246493 38% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 24.0651302605 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 26.0 41.998997996 62% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 8.3376753507 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1045.0 1615.20841683 65% => OK
No of words: 238.0 315.596192385 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.39075630252 5.12529762239 86% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.92775363542 4.20363070211 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.27523627164 2.80592935109 81% => OK
Unique words: 119.0 176.041082164 68% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.561755894193 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 329.4 506.74238477 65% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.2975951904 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.1512428291 49.4020404114 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 65.3125 106.682146367 61% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.875 20.7667163134 72% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.75 7.06120827912 39% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.01903807615 179% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.171223916269 0.244688304435 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0650960191803 0.084324248473 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0660814953971 0.0667982634062 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.141532059755 0.151304729494 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0878675781224 0.056905535591 154% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 6.7 13.0946893788 51% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 74.19 50.2224549098 148% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 11.3001002004 57% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 7.59 12.4159519038 61% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.72 8.58950901804 78% => OK
difficult_words: 36.0 78.4519038076 46% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.1190380762 75% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.7795591182 65% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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